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The analysis regarding the income of coffee and bananas in five different areas between 1999 & 2004


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Sep 15, 2021   #1

IELTS Writing Task 1 - sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and banaanas



A breakdown of the analysis regarding the income of coffee and bananas in five different areas between 1999 and 2004 is depicted in the table. Looking for an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the sales of coffee saw an upward trend in all of countries while the revenue of bananas two of the three countries experienced a downward trend. The largest increase in coffee sales was by far in the UK, whereas the most significant rise in bananas' revenue was in Belgium.

A more detailed look in the bar chart, the figure for coffee in the UK rose significantly, from 1.5 to 20 euros throughout the period, followed by Switzerland and Belgium increased slightly from 3 to 6 millions and 1 to 1,7 millions respectively. The remaining two countries remained unchanged the given five-year period.

Apart from the previous comparison, the sales of bananas experienced a slight increase in Belgium and UK , from 0,6 to 4 millions and 1 to 5 millions respectively, followed by Switzerland increased nearly threefold over the period. In contrast, the figure for Sweden and Denmark witnessed a slight dip, more than halved in the end of period.



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Sep 16, 2021   #2
is depicted in the table

Incorrect. There are 2 seperate tables presented for this report. This is automatically a 4 paragraph report due to the number of images involved.

that the sales of coffee

while the revenue of bananas

What is the connection between the 2 different products? Why did the writer choose to present unrelated info in a single sentence? What is the commonality ? The analysis is incomplete and confusing.

The remaining two countries

Refer to these by name and offer some sort of comparative analysis to help the C + C score.

more than halved

Based on what figure? Where is the basis of this conclusion?

The uniter is in a hurry to complete the task. He was watching the clock more than he was studying the figures. This led to several haphazard references in the presentation that affected the report clarity.


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