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The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire.


erwiin 5 / 12  
Sep 16, 2016   #1
IELTS Writing Task 1 History of the Circus

The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire. The circus Maximus, which was founded in Rome, mostly showing popular spectator sport, chariot race. It also showed gladiator and exhibited the exotic animals. The venue of circus Maximus was built with wood, but Roman Empire renovated it become huge marble stadium that could accommodate more than 200.000 people. The monarchs of Europe had court jesters, whom combined the talents of jugglers, mimes, and clowns.

During sixteenth century, Philip Astley, who was a skilled riding on horseback, founded the first modern circus. He performed in France at the request of Louis XV after he popular in London. He included clowns, acrobats, parade of trained animals, and slapstick humor for develop his circus. In the seventeenth century, the businessman from America, Joshua Brown, was a success to build a circus business. Currently, the variation of Brown's circus many adopted by the other circuses.

fadhilmd25 41 / 75 11  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
Dear Erwiin, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct me,

which was founded in Rome--> can be changed into "was located"

he was popular in London

Hope it helps you to improve your writing.

Regards
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Sep 16, 2016   #3
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections

... mostly showing popular spectator sport, and chariot race.
... accommodate more than 200.000 peoples .
... combined the talents of jugglers, mimes, and clowns.
... who was a skilled to riding on horseback, founded ...

Maybe you can using some conjuction.


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