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IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ANIMAL TESTING / moral issues


haotran1198 1 / -  
May 30, 2019   #1

experiments of animals - pros and cons



Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


In recent decades, animal testing remains a highly controversial issue, generating a great deal of public debate. We are testing on the animal in order to invent new medicines or vaccines and test the safety of those products. I would have supported a limited amount of animal experimentation for the development of medicines.

On the one hand, thank for testing technique so that a thousand people all over the world can be saved and against a lot of dangerous deceases. Rat and monkey have similar biology structure with a human that professors choose to test on them. One result of this is that it can open a new age with the revolution of medicines. Furthermore, experiments can decrease the number of people who were died each year. I believed that animal experiments can decrease the quality of the health care system.

On the other hand, opponents of animal testing often claimed that it is cruel and inhumanity. Firstly, it makes an animal suffer repetitive motion injuries. For instants, professors have to put a chemical on the animal's body every day for searching the effect of that medical or vaccine. As a result, the animal was died devastatingly and may on the brink of extinction. All humans are created equal but do they care about animal equally. Otherwise, I believed that it has a lot of ways to test the safety of other products which can replace the animal.

Taking into consideration, it brings a lot of benefits for human although it is wrong in the moral ground and harmful for animal. Above all, with the development, I believed that it has a different way for professors to testing

Maria [Contributor] - / 952 339  
May 30, 2019   #2
@haotran1198
Hi there!

Welcome to the forum. Let me assist you with your essay.

First and foremost, it is critical that you ensure that you optimize the space you have in your essay. You can do this through removing irrelevant and unnecessary words (this includes filler words). Emphasize only on areas that you wish to pay attention to.

Secondly, make sure that you use a more academic tone when you are writing. Doing this will help you create more formality in your essay.

Lastly, I would be cautious of the way that you transition between your sentences. Organic transitioning can help you immensely establish more of a natural tone.

Remember to only incorporate lines that are necessary for establishing your thoughts.

Best of luck as always!
suong1510 5 / 9 1  
Jun 1, 2019   #3
Hi there,
I think your idea is good, but you need to add more examples to clear it and make it more convinced.
Also, I think the second paragraph should only have one main idea because your ideas have similar meanings, that the testing of animals helps improved health.

Hope that my comments will help you.


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