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Animals Starving in Venezuela Zoos


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
During an economic crisis, many animals in Venezuela's Caricuao Zoo, for instance rabbits, tapirs and birds undergo starving since the administrator of the zoo faces the financial problem to buy animal's food. The decline of oil price is considered as a factor causing economic downturn, thus the country may not supply the basic needs and other necessity including animal's food. The zoo's worker have been feeding lions, tigers and elephants with fruits. In the long term, this situation will affect negatively to animal's health , while it is able to impact on psychology at the short time. In may, three animals died causing others are moved from Paraguana Peninsula to a park in Merida. In fact, the condition is not only in Venezuala but also in other countries and has been becoming global problem. In march, 200 animals died in the Khan Younis zoo in southern Gaza because of the lack of feed as the result of the war between Palestine and Israel. In addition, the Taiz zoo in Yemen also experiences the same circumstance.
Fatirtalent 12 / 19  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Dear Aris
You've done well, i adore the way of your writing. But, there are several inputs for me.

1. please pay attention with your tense, i think since your are describe the past phenomenon, you need to use past simple on your note.
2. kindly look at your plural or singular word, don't forget to put "s" if it is singular.

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The decline of oil price iswas considered as a principal factor causingcaused economic was downturn, thus the country ...

The zoo's workers have been feeding lions ...
.., while it is able to impact onanimalpsychology at the short time.


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