Animals are being used in medical researchers

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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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nowadays , animals are being used in medical researchers. Such researches are hold up by a few, while another group is more care about animal right. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion.

Scientists should use alternative methods of research instead of experimenting on animals.To measure the effectiveness of drugs, some animals are commonly used. These activities not only hurt them, but also cause them to die early. If animals are continuously used for this, they may extinct soon which might have adverse impact on the environment. Therefor, experiment on animals should be banned.

However, medical science is depended on animal experimentation greatly. Even most researchers prefer animals to test new drugs as some animals' DNA is identical to humans' DNA. if using animals is stopped, such researches become impossible to carry. For this reason, experience on animals is considered as a legal activity for medicals' inventions.

In my opinion,animals can be used only to invent new medicine which is significant impact on human's life. Indeed there is no suitable substitutes of animals to carry researches.Nonetheless, misused of animals must be prevented. In fact people need to avoid animals in producing cosmetic products. So I would say that people can use animals if it need for medical purpose.

It is apparent that animals testing is only a way to resolve existing health issues. Also this has enormous potential to bring new inventions to new concerns.Although some are against for this, I would opine that animal experiments should not be banned for the invention of medicines.

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