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IELTS WRITING TASK 1; Annual expenditure of a British school


mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 12, 2014   #1
The three pie charts illustrate the figure of annual expenditure of a particular british school in 1981,1991 and 2001.

In all three years the greatest expenditure on staff salaries. but while other workers' salaries declined from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001, teachers' salaries remained the biggest cost , occupied 50% of total spending in 1991 and slightly dropped to 45% in 2001.

Furthermore, Insurance occupied the least percentage of school budget but it shows an upward trend,went from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001.

Expenditure on resources such as books had rose to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to 9% in 2001. whereas, the cost of expenditure and equipment shows an opposite trend. this cost decreased to only 5% in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it constituted 23% of the school budget.

I look forward to hearing from you.

JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 12, 2014   #2
not british, it should be British

Instead of the separation of each year, write "during a period of 20 years, from 1981 to 2001" or " between 1981 and 2001"

butHowever , ...

I haven't mentioned all mistakes!
OP mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 12, 2014   #3
Please mention all my mistakes that I have done in this task
OP mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 13, 2014   #4
please find the attached details of pie charts.

reply.



sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 13, 2014   #5
In all three years the greatest expenditure on staff salaries. But( LETTER AFTER FULL STOP HA TO BE AS PER 1ST ALPHABET) while other workers' salaries declined from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001, teachers salaries remained the biggest cost, ( SPACE SHOULD BE ONLY AFTER COMMA NOT BEFORE) AND TAKEN OVER 50% of total spending in 1991 and slightly dropped to 45% in 2001.
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Mar 13, 2014   #6
Hey, your image is too small for us to have a good look at it. I think it is better you upload it once again with a bigger version of the image.

With regard to your structure, I strongly suggest to follow what Pahan has suggested you. Have the parts - Introduction, Overview and Details in your response.

The three pie charts illustrate the figuredetails of annual expenditure of a particular british school in 1981,1991 and 2001.
OP mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 13, 2014   #7
Thank u for ur reply. But how much bands i will get for this task???
JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 13, 2014   #8
I think 5.5 )
OP mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 13, 2014   #9
But we write overview in last para.
OP mona bhadange 1 / 6  
Mar 14, 2014   #10
but we write overview in last para.


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