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IELTS Task 1 Annual Expenses by Local Bureaucracy in Several Lands


Citra07 3 / 4 4  
Dec 28, 2016   #1
A comparison of the information about the annual expenses by local bureaucracy in several lands between 1980 and 2000 is illustrated in the pie charts and is measured by percent. Overall, higher education always the biggest portions in every decade. However, K-12 education always declines until the end of periods.

During two decades, higher education increased 10% from 35% to 45%. But, at the end of the decade, it decreased 5% and became 40%. The percentages of K-12 education slowly decreased from 25% to 18% in 2000. Expenses of environmental services were rose 1% in the first 10 years from 4% to 5% and rose again 4% in the second 10 years from 5% to 9%.

Expenses for the transportation went down in 1990 as much as 10% and climbed in 2000 reached 22%. Different from transportation, expenses for health and human resources increased in the first decade of 14% to 20%. However, in the last decade health and human resources was decline to 10%.



Dayat 2 / 4 1  
Dec 28, 2016   #2
Hallo Mr.Citra, Good night, i have some corrections for you.

Expenses of environmental services were rose 1% in the first ...

The correction is (Expenses of environmental services rose 1% in the first 10 years from 4% to 5% and rose again 4% in the second 10 years from 5% to 9%)

... and human resources was decline to 10%.

The correction is (However, in the last decade health and human resources declined to 10%)


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