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The annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films


thutyedaniel 32 / 38 17  
May 19, 2015   #1
The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The bar chart illustrates information regarding the amount of rentals and sales in different types of movies from a particular store from 2002 to 2011. At first glance, it is evident that the annual number of rentals decreases significantly over the period, and this trend was followed by VHS sales, even just the first four years. Noted, the annual number of DVD sales saw a dramatic increase until the middle of period and it was a dramatic decrease at the end of period.

According to the bar chart, it shows that the annual number between rentals and VHS sales have the similar pattern, both figures experienced a slight decrease of the period in question. The annual number of rentals stood at around 180,000 in 2002 and it was a slight decrease at 60,000 in 2011. And the amount of VHS sales dropped from 80,000 to 10,000 in 2005.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar chart, it reveals that DVS sales type increase gradually at the first six years, and it was reached a peak at approximately 300,00 in 2007. While this figure saw a significant decrease over the next period. Finally, the annual number of blue-ray sales only resulted at around 10,000 in the end of period.



lcturn87 - / 435 236  
May 19, 2015   #2
I think that you have a good start with your summary. I wanted you to have an accurate summary so I looked at the bar chart to help assist you. I hope that this will be helpful to you. I am going to use the initials of what is represented and you can write it out. For example "V" is for VHS.

-I would change how you describe the bar chart. When you state it describes the different types of movies, it could make the reader think about genre. This actually describes the sales of movies according to the different formats in which you can purchase.

-You should separate your summary of the rentals from the "V" sales. You could state: "Also, "V" sales decreased significantly from 2002-2005". You should use a transition word rather than noted to begin the next sentence (i.e. However or Yet). I believe that this bar chart is showing the sales of "D" and "B" discs. If you can recall, "B" discs became popular after "D". The bar chart seems to show that "V" tapes were phased out or no longer in existence in 2006. Yet, "B" discs were available in 2007 and becoming more widely used.

-This would be a great addition to your summary if you add how "V" tapes were phased out and "B" steadily became more popular.

-Rental and "V" sales seem to be stated again. You should explain the amount of rentals as a drastic decrease. If sales were at 180,000 and dropped to 60,000, a significant amount of money was lost.

-Change this sentence to: "A more detailed analysis from the bar chart reveals that "D" sales increased gradually during the first six years, and reached a peak at approximately 300,000 in 2007".

-I see a small decrease in "D" sales not a significant decrease. When you discuss "B" sales you can describe it as reaching a peak of 10,000 in sales.
siddiqumar 15 / 9 8  
May 19, 2015   #3
Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar chart, it reveals that DVS sales type rose gradually at the first six years, and it was reachedthis is passive voice a peak at approximately 300,00 in 2007. While this figure saw a significant decrease over the next period. Finally, the annual number of blue-ray sales only resulted at around 10,000 in the end of period.

hi thutyedaniel,
your writing actually is quiet good, but you have to pay attention more about using tenses. if the history is in the past, you must use past tense also. Also, please do not use the same word in your writing as it is not really good


... number of rentals decreases significantly
... it was a dramatic decrease at the end of period
... experienced a slight decrease of the period
... it was a slight decrease at 60,000 in 2011
... saw a significant decrease over the next period.

keep writing


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