Twenty first century witnessed a world transformtion,with the development of the society,our lives are more enjoyable and convient than before.When we have a face to face talk through the Internet by computers.When we travle to abroad in less a one day.When we get the information by GPS when we drive in a strange city.I t is the development of science that really changed our lives.In my mind, I think that it is the contributions of scientists are more important to our society.
The twenty first century witnessed a world transform
a tion
. With the development
of society ,our lives are more enjoyable and conv
en ient than
ever before.
Great examples of these are: w hen we have a face to face talk through the Internet by computers
, when we trav
el abroad in less
than a day, and when we
receive directions by GPS when driv
ing in a strange city.
The development of science
has really changed our lives. In my mind, I think that it is the contributions of scientists
that are more important to our society
than those from artists .
okay this is really a lot of work to be doing, hopefully you can understand what I'm saying
do you know what Microsoft Word is? if so just put this essay into a Microsoft Word Document and press the F7 button at the top of your keyboard. A window should pop up and that will do spell check for you and should also correct your grammar. Have a friend come over ( a friend with English as their first language) and go through the editing process. They probably understand microsoft word and can help you fix your essay into exactly what you want it to say. If you put that english is not your primary language on your application the admissions office should also put this into consideration when reading your essay.
i edited your intro to let you know that there are a lot of mistakes, but they are only grammatical and spelling errors
the overall essay is very good
and I can't stress this enough
have a friend who speaks fluent english help you edit this essay. sit down together and have them help you through what you want to say. They can easily point out grammatical errors to you and have microsoft word work for you the way you would like it to work. If you sit down together, editing this essay should take no time at all
you don't even have to sit down with a FRIEND. ask your english/language arts teacherdon't get me wrong, this is a very good topic and you prove yourself well
you're a good writer who is having problems overcoming the language barrier
keep practicing your english!
read more books and ask questions about statements you might not understand
you'll catch on to the language in no time.