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Do you argee that playing computer game is a waste of time? Children should not play?


angelinee827 2 / 4  
Mar 30, 2011   #1

computer games seems a non-beneficial activity for children



Playing computer game is became a trend among the teenager, especially on-line games. There are plenty of children who join several computer games in order to make some friends or spend their spare time. However, to my way of thinking, I do agree the children should continue play this kind of game since it is waste of time.

To begin with, playing computer games might has negative influence on child's health. Take my little cousin for example, he enjoys to play computer game since he was in elementary school. The first thing when he back from school is to turn on the computer then plays all night long. It is like an addiction that he buried himself in the cyber world. Finally he became seriously nearsighted and even ill because the lack of sleep.

In addition, on-line game can be dangerous to ourselves. For instance, there are some news indicated that there are many potential criminals hide in the game, they cheated with some sugared word and some young children got hurt when they met each other. It shows that playing computer games is not only a waste of time but also a danger for young people.

In conclusion, playing computer games seems a non-beneficial activity for children. It is not only dangerous but also unhealthy for the kids. Moreover, there are many other things to do which could replace the computer games, such as swimming, reading and do some exercises when they have free time. I believe these will help our children to become more healthy no matter physical or mental.

KathyLala 20 / 116  
Mar 31, 2011   #2
Here are my suggestions
=> Playing computer game is became a trend among teenagers

=> I disagree with the idea that children should continue play this kind of game because it is waste of time. (If you agree with "children should play..." then your intro is conflicted with your body paras)

=>... he has enjoyed playing computer game since he was in elementary school (enjoy followed by the gerund "verb+ing" playing, not "to play")

=> After coming home from school, he turns on the computer right away and then plays all night long.

=> He creates an addiction that buries himself in the cyber world. Eventually, he becomes seriously nearsighted and even ill because of the lack of sleep.

=> ... online games can be dangerous to ourselves

=>... there are some news indicated that there are many potential criminals hide in the game, they cheated with some sugared words and some young children got hurt when they met each other (who are "they"?-you mean that while children play games online, they chat and actually go out to meet each other and get into a fighting?)

=>... such as swimming, reading, and doing some exercises when they have free time
birdman 3 / 28  
Apr 5, 2011   #3
Good essay I should say! I think that somebody should control children. Take for example their parents or elderly brothers and sisters. There should be a limit of playing computer games. However, in today's society people present each other computer and other techniques. That means that it is spreading quickly almost daily. Also there are good and intellectual games which helps children to be quicker, careful and cleverer in some cases. In general people should know when and where to draw a line!!!


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