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TASK 2 : I argue that the state should pay the course fee at univesities for us


Zihni92 3 / 8  
Feb 23, 2015   #1
Someone believe that government should pay the course fees for everyone who wants to study at universities.
Do you agree or disagree ?

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Education as a need of human's life. As per some experts, the government should responsible for any course fee that their citizen takes at universities. From my point of view, I would believe that government should pay the course of citizens who it is showing brilliant in professional qualification also should investigate the parents and teacher association work.

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somasalims 15 / 27 5  
Feb 23, 2015   #2
Hi Zihni, I find some mistakes in your essay.

Education as a need of human's life . As per some experts, the government should responsible for any course fee that their citizen takes at universities. From my point of view, I would believe that government should pay the course of citizens who it is showing brilliant in professional qualification and also should investigate the parents and teacher association work.

-Education as a need of human's life , this sentence does not have any verb. It should be "Education is a need of human's life "

-should responsible should be "should be responsible "
-who it is showing brilliant , after 'who', you should put 'verb', so omit 'it'!
-You need conjunction 'and ' in the last sentence because you have two verbs.

The first positive effect on free course of universities is that all kind of peoples can join in their education which this programmed(should be program) can exert an influence on someone. To be an advance city, the government have to compete with their citizen's education. As it can be seen from the number of costs estimates for education which depends on state and local spending, and pupil's population. For example, as a result in website, US governments website, in 2015 shows that the local government spending in the United States has different value in each states, in California spent on $79.7 billion, Florida $29.5 billion, and District of Columbia $2.4 billion.

In addition, the upbeat condition of an environment, the government should contribute the money in a path of the right pupils. The pupils which show great dedications to their professional qualification can get some awards from their government, moreover to measure the right children, the government should hold some competition for justify the children's qualification. For instance, scholarship for most outstanding students in their universities, money rewards for young scientist, and achievement for the best teacher and students in each curriculum subjects.

-I do not understand the flow of these two paragraphs because you put the examples in the last sentences without any results and conclusions as one idea paragraph. Perhaps you have another reference, let me know it as well.

However, a negative side of this is the real impact on the wealthy family as an impact on the free courses . This because some rich families are support their children for getting the poverty scholarship. For example, many rich students registered their self for getting Bidik Misi Scholarship which is for poor families. As a result, some students are able to modify their condition for getting this scholarship.

-a negative side of this has the same meaning as as an impact on the free courses (cycling)

The aforementioned evidence shows that although free education have to achieve an aim to improve pupil's education, some people use this in wrong ways. However, I strongly believe that the governments should pay the course fee (Try to paraphrase this conclusion as to be different from your thesis statement) . Where possible, this program should be monitoring in order to support the education development.


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