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IELTS - it is argued that educating hometown literature is more vital than that of other nations


kimlune 1 / -  
Jul 29, 2021   #1

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (OPINION)



Topic: Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

In this day and age, people are becoming wiser and wiser with a wide range of knowledge available to access. Besides, it is argued educating hometown literature is more vital than that of other nations. In my own point of view, every literary field has its own values which should be considered important after all.

First and foremost, it's obvious to bring native literary works into education since national values are highly appreciated. For instance, only when being taught did students entirely comprehend those literary works such as poems that comprise metaphors and precious messages. Additionally, learners can have a feeling of patriotism after gaining a deep understanding of the origin and culture of their nation. In particular, many schools have brought famous national literary works in lectures as a sign of the importance of the admiration for a country's literature.

On the other hand, international literature can be equally priceless to national ones. Firstly, it's undeniable that each nation has its unique values and reflections of its specialties. The more variable cultures people access, the broader knowledge gained due to separated perspectives toward a specific aspect. Secondly, there are some foreign literary which are worldwide recognized that individuals had better appreciate them. Take the novel Don Quixote as an example of valuable literary works that tutors about the thorough thought between bravery and intelligence, the writing has been brought into many schools for educating till now.

To conclude, not only does ethnic literature cover profound implications, but it also provides citizens with flag-waving. In comparison, other works still contain its inimitable prices that are considered to be grateful.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Jul 29, 2021   #2
The writer did not do a very good job of interpreting the original prompt. A personal opinion launched the restatement in a manner unrelated to the original topic. Then, a somewhat confusing topic restatement followed, ending with a response unrelated to the qquestion provided. In effect, the writer failed to deliver the introduction paragraph in a manner that would have been beneficial to the task scoring.

When the writer is asked if he agrees or disagrees, the response must directly provide a keyword based answer. They cue words are, " agree or disagree". choose only from the provided response choices. Do not alter the presentation response. Do not write a comparative essay when it is not directly instructed as "discuss both views" in the writing instruction. The incorrect response paragraphs and lack of related opinion presentation are what may cause a failing score for the essay. That is regardless of the other scoring considerations, which will also have score deductions that will affect the final overall score.
lexuanhoa123 5 / 12 7  
Jul 30, 2021   #3
Hi @kimlune,
I think Holt is right. You should write a comparative essay when the topic instructs you to "Discuss both points of view" or to answer the question "To what extent do you agree or disagree?".

With topic states directedly: "Do you agree or disagree?": you should give a clear answer "yes" or "no". I suggest a writing structure below:
-Introduction: Introduce the topic, and give your clear answer ("yes" or "no")
-Main paragraph: Points and examples to support your answer.
-Main paragraph: Other points and examples to support your answer.
-Conclusion: give your answer again and a brief and overall reason(this should be taken from your paragraph and not outside) why you think so.

I hope my feedback is useful to you.
Good luck with your next essay!!!


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