hi, by mistake i have posted this essay in undergraduate. it under comes graduate essay.
that's now fixed ;) ... Also we moved it to writing feedback forum because it's a GRE essay :D
While it may be true that the number of shopper
s in Central Plaza has been decreasing since last two years
According to the author, banned on skateboarding would increase the sales at central plaza.
According to the author, a ban on skateboarding would increase the sales at central plaza
While the correlations are logical and probable, there may be hidden factors that are responsible for decreased number of shoppers.
While the correlations seem to be somewhat logical and probable, there also could be hidden factors that contribute to the decreased number of shoppers.