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junisha 2 / 3  
Oct 2, 2013   #1
"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."

In the mention paragraph the value of property in Brookville community increases in seven year by implementing some restriction and landscaping and thing they are implementing for the Deerhaven Acres but they didn't provide the proof of that hike in price and its effect on the community. the argument is full of fallacious and it need to be elaborate with all factor and reason.

In the above argument, relations are made between landscaping and price value of the property but it is totally uncommon to relate certain thing with their aesthetic, coloring and beauty with price value. They are mentioning that before seven year it was not much valuable than it is now, but for this increment in price value of Brookvile community yard may have another reason like development of that place due to establishment of new company , opening of mall, Movie Theater, opening of new school/college as so on. But we can claim directly aesthetic was the main reason of hiking of price as it claim in the argument. Something gets value only and only, if and only if, it can help mankind. For the development of certain thing many factor works, we could not be judgmental on only one cause as the Brookville community did.

In the above argument, it is not mention what restriction they comprises in landscaping, many time painting and coloring contain certain chemical effect or causes of infection on people may be it can affect the children of that community. Such a common restriction if you are applying on the Deerhaven acres, it may or may not work. You are extrapolating something based on only one reason that is naive, a good person or a diligent people seeks all factor that may causing effect to certain thing.

Further, it mentioning, in order to hike the price value of Deerhaven acres implementing same idea as they mention for Brookville community but before implementing something we should be inquisitive, It is not necessary, every function work everywhere. That may have adverse effect on the community people or may be in place of hiking price it lost its own value .

For development of any land or place house painting cannot be the main reason or factor.

Implementing or experiment of certain thing is always good but not blindly and only one thing cannot be the reason of development. They should give proper point and convince people by their own idea so that it helps other.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 2, 2013   #2
In the mention paragraph the value of property in Brookville community increases in seven year by implementing some restriction and landscaping and thing they are implementing for the Deerhaven Acres but they didn't provide the proof of that hike in price and its effect on the community.

This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your sentence you get carried away. Try shorter sentences and improve clarity.

theThe argument is full of fallacious and it needs to be elaborated with all factors and reasons .

This may be just a draft. But you better present it neatly here if you are seriously interested in having feedbacks on your writing. So, start your sentences with capital letter and have proper punctuation in right places.

it needs/ they need
to be elaborated/ to elaborate


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