The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
My response:
To give advice about which real estate firm is better for selling a home, the writer of this letter provides several advantages of Adams Realty: more and better real estate agents; higher prices of homes sold; taking less time to sell a home. However, the writer's argument on these three aspects is full of assumptions and holes which weakened the argument. His/her advice is not convincing enough.
First, through comparison of real estate agents employed by the two firms, the writer tries to prove that Adams has better and more sufficient manpower resource to sell home. However, more agents and working whole-time don't necessarily mean better home-selling performance. For example, if Adams has much more amount of business to deal with, its agents would put less time and effort in each home-selling deal. In this case, its agents would do no better job than Fitch's agents. And the selling capacity of the agents of the two firms is not clear too. Sometimes, a talented part-time real estate agent is more effective in selling home than an ordinary whole-time agent. Without a reliable and full analysis of the personnel and the business they deal with, Adams' advantage of having better personnel can't be firmly established to support the argument.
Then the writer cites Adams' higher revenue and sold price to show that Adams can sell homes at higher prices. Of course, selling home at a higher price may result in more profit for homeowner. But the writer fails to demonstrate whether the homeowner can benefit from higher price of home sales. Adams' higher revenue can only indicate that the firm earned more money from home sales. Have the homeowners shared the additional profit? We don't know. Besides, higher average home sales may not be caused by Adams' ability to sell home at a better price. For example, the home sold by Adams may be bigger or closer to downtown district; this kind of estates is certainly more expensive. To strengthen the argument, the writer would benefit from providing clearer report on the home sales of the two firms.
Finally, on the basis of his/her own experience, the writer implies that the Adams takes less time to sell home. However, this is based on two assumptions: the current overall economic environment is not significantly different from that of ten years ago; there's no significant difference between the writer's two homes sold by Adams and Fitch that could cause different selling speed. If the town was affected by economic crisis ten years ago and the business became warm up in recent years, selling homes ten years ago would be much more difficult for Fitch. If the home listed with Fitch was farther from city's central part; older or had worse physical condition, it would be less attractive to buyers and would naturally need more time to be sold. These possibilities can be used to challenge the writer's conclusion. To enforce the argument, the writer should exclude these interference possibilities by assessing the effects of time factor and home conditions.
The homeowner has identified several important characteristics that are important in choosing a real estate firm. However, this argument is full of assumptions that make it not convincing enough. To give a more helpful advice to his/her friend, the writer should carefully plug these weakening holes.
To give advice about which real estate firm is better for selling a home, the writer of this letter provides several advantages of Adams Realty over Fitch RealtyNeed to mention both in the opening.
: more and better real estate agents; higher prices of homes sold; taking less time to sell a home.
You should have taken these reasons to a new sentence without cramping them up in the opening sentence.
However, the writer's argument on these three aspects is full of assumptions and holes which weakened the argument. His/her advice is not convincing enough.
However, the writer's arguments on these three aspects are based on assumptions that do not have proper grounds. Therefore his or her advice is weak and not convincing.First, through comparison of real estate agents employed by the two firms, the writer tries to prove that Adams has better and more sufficient manpower resources to sell homes .
