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Argument Topic about the way to increase the more viewers of news programs

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Sep 16, 2017   #1
Argument topic: The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level

a memorandum from the business manager of a tv station

News programs disseminate awareness to the people about the circumstances that are happening overall around the world. The manager received the complaints about reducing the time of local and weather news.The people who concerned about local news must be the people living in that locality.The manager mentioned that most of the viewers have a problem with it. The manager did not mention who are the viewers.If the viewers do not belong to local places, they will not concern about the fact of changing the times of news slots.In order to draw any conclusion from this, the manager should have work on types of viewers who are not compatible with this change and then accordingly proceed.

Advertising local business must have a reason to cancel the contract with the television station. The change in timings of news slots seems have no relation with advertising companies. The manager should investigate to find out the plausible reason for this cancellation of the contract.It may be the coincidence that time shifting of news slots and cancellation of the agreement between them happen simultaneously. Without analyzing the actual situation, must not make any conclusion.

The number of viewers not only depend on the news programs.As television station comprises of a variety of television programs, one must not only focused on the news channels viewers.Although news programs provide us an important information, some people like to watch entertainment program also.The manager is focusing only on news programs.As a business manager of a television station.he must think ecumenically.

His main motive is to attract more viewers and make the profit.In order to do this, restoring time of news slots is a narrow view. Maybe, people are now adapted to that paradigm.Restoring back to prior is not a wise decision, it could not give satisfactory results.He can conduct a survey and get an idea about improvements he should do, practical approach is way more efficient than theoretical theories.Television programs are not only restricted to a particular locality, it is widespread.Therefore, the manager also thinks broadly .

Betsyy 3 / 7  
Sep 16, 2017   #2
that are happening overall around the world.
I think the sentence would make more sense without the word overall.
manager did not mention who are the viewers
I think this is supposed to be, who the viewers were.
These are just some of the typos I noticed in your essay. The typos make your essay difficult to comprehend. Try to go over your writing for typos.
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Sep 17, 2017   #3
Abhilash, your arguments are not very convincing as you do not show a higher degree of analytical thinking beyond the mere paraphrasing of the original content. You state facts based upon the original presentation without offering additional considerations, insights, or possibilities / arguments running counter to the present discussion. This has created a weak discussion that does not truly consider all possible arguments and counter arguments regarding the topic. Your statements are not developed in a manner that show a deeper understanding or consideration of the pros and cons of the suggestions in the original prompt. Your analysis needs to have better considerations before it can be considered a strong plea for the restoration of the previous programming. You were not able to convince the reader regarding your position.

The other weakness of your essay comes in the form of its problematic presentation. Your sentences are not spaced properly even after you end a sentence. You need to remember to hit the space bar in order to create reading space on the page. Also, every starting word of a sentence must be capitalized. What is even more worrisome is the fact that you have a tendency to use big English words without really knowing the meaning of it. For example, you used the term "ecumenically" when you meant to say "economically" or something similar in terms of economics. Ecumenically is a religious term that is used to define the promotion of a universal church. Which is tremendously far in meaning and intention from the way you intended to use the term in your essay. Make sure you know the proper English term and meaning before you use it otherwise you will lower your score due to vocabulary and contextual problems.

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