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Essay: From ARPANET to the Internet


bubbledesigns 2 / 4  
Dec 13, 2006   #1
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The Necessity of the Internet



The Internet is no longer a tool for only transferring packets of data across countries. It has evolved from that feeble and quite slow age computing. The Internet has turned into a device that provides services for almost any age. It can be used as the ever so profound communication service, which can include all ranges of communication including those of advertising purposes. The Internet can be of use for learning and has widespread access to information. One other very popular use of the Internet is for entertainment.

On the night of October 29th of the year 1969, the Internet was launched in a very basic form known as ARPANET. This was nothing like our current form of the Internet. The Internet soon became a public interest, and what is known as a Web Browser was invented. The Web Browser shows the websites to your monitor for you to view. That eventually evolved into other applications and lead to applications such as instant messaging and email. Email is the most frequently used form of communication and the most used form of the Internet. Because of the ability to email someone at any time and at any place, many people can send important documents in a matter of seconds rather than worrying about the reliability of "snail mail", or the wait. Memos, letters, general information and other files can be used in email. People can send a picture or attach an important file such as a presentation to an email that needs to be sent. However, with such and ease of use and simply enjoyable experience of email, we also must deal with the annoying advertisements commonly referred to as spam or junk.

Advertisements come in all shapes and sizes or in all file formats and templates. Not all advertising is sent through the form of email. It can come as a "pop-up" or even be an entire website. Web designers get paid mostly for the designs of companies advertising a product. These designs can cost anywhere from one hundred dollars to an extreme of three thousand. There have even been claims of web designs being sold for over fifty thousand. Why would someone pay so much for a website? The answer is simple, the Internet is huge. The average time that a person evaluates a website is usually three seconds. In those three seconds, the consumer needs to know what the site is about, and be attracted to the colors and special effects. Advertising is vital for large companies such as Microsoft or Apple. They need to catch the public eye with catchy phrases and impressive design and graphics. If the Internet were not available, many of these big companies might not have nearly as many sales as possible because of lack of advertising. A company can not reach its full potential if it does not have all the proper tools; such as the Internet and good web design or graphic design. The Internet isn't all about making loads of money, there are also many excellent sources for those in need of information.

People can learn about almost any subject that they want in a matter of seconds because of the Internet. Very famous websites such as Google.com or Ask.com are great sources of information because they search all of the most popular websites for the information you need. They can provide great learning sources and help expedite the process of finding a certain website.

The newest form of the Internet is coming as a way of entertainment. There are now mobile web browsers for cell phones. The newest video game consoles such as the Xbox 360 and PS3 offer a web browser or communication with other players online. They also allow a player to play a game with another player. This is more of a accessory rather than a necessity for the public. However, for the companies that make these devices, it is now very necessary for them to add Internet capabilities to almost everything.

The Internet is used in everyday life, as a means of communication, learning, and entertainment. It is growing greatly everyday. New people discover what it is, and others are discovering new programming techniques that will improve quality and impress consumers.

EF_Team2 1 / 1,709  
Dec 14, 2006   #2
Greetings, Michael!

You have written a fine expository essay! I saw only a few places where changes need to be made:

"It has evolved from that feeble and quite slow age computing."

I think you left out "of" in front of "computing."

"The Internet has turned into a device that provides services for almost any age."

Did you mean "any age of consumer"?

"It can be used as the ever so profound communication service, which can include all ranges of communication including those of advertising purposes."

Insert hypens in "ever-so-profound". I would also change "of advertising" to "for advertising."

"However, with such and ease of use and simply enjoyable experience of email, we also must deal with the annoying advertisements commonly referred to as spam or junk."

I think you probably didn't mean to include "and" between "such" and "ease".

"The answer is simple, the Internet is huge."

A colon would be better in this sentence than a comma.

"If the Internet were not available, many of these big companies might not have nearly as many sales as possible because of lack of advertising."

"As possible" isn't necessary in this sentence.

"A company can not reach its full potential if it does not have all the proper tools; such as the Internet and good web design or graphic design.

"Cannot" is one word, and the semi-colon should be a comma.

"The Internet isn't all about making loads of money, there are also many excellent sources for those in need of information."

This time you need a semi-colon instead of a comma.

"This is more of a accessory rather than a necessity for the public."

I think you meant "an accessory."

Good job! You've got a clear introduction with a thesis statement, you explain and expand in the body of the text, and you sum it all up in the concluding paragraph. It's does just what this type of essay is supposed to do.

Best wishes, and good luck in all your endeavors!

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP bubbledesigns 2 / 4  
Dec 14, 2006   #3
Thank you so much! I am turning in the essay tomorrow, with all the corrections. Hopefully it will be a success. I am not too worried about anything now that I got your help with the grammer, because that was my only error in my last essay making it a 92% rather than 100%. The only thing I am a little concerned about is some of my word choice. I noticed I used device, common, and public way too much. I also think that I need some better vocabulary which I will probably add in tonight.

Other then that, thank you so much for your help!

Mike
EF_Team2 1 / 1,709  
Dec 15, 2006   #4
You're welcome--I was glad to help!

Isn't the thesaurus a great tool? I love mine! I use the thesaurus feature in Word all the time.

Good luck!

Sarah


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