art is a unseperatable
a -- an
have through
have (been) through
showing how the specific age of people live.
showing how people in the specific age live.
Another factor I would like to discuss is that art is a way we understand the history and also a way we would remain the present culture for the future.
Again, 'I would like to' is used more in oral English.
art is a way(in which) we understand the history
also a way(approach by which, avoid repeating the same word) we
wouldremain (maintain, 'remain' is a intransitive verb ) the present culture for the future.
Art, as we would consider a tool of helping people releasing from the outside world, should never be ignored. Also, it is a window to show the outside world of people's feeling of their inside world.
Art,
as (which) we
would consider
(as) a tool of ...
You use too much 'would' in your essay, that is not necessary, and sometimes they are incorrect.
I would not agree that some people's suggestion that government should ignor the art developing but more focusing on the other fields.
I would not agree
that some people's suggestion that
(the) government should ignor
(e) the
art developing (development of art)but
more focusing (focus more)on the other fields(add 'such as...' would be better )
Also, it is a window to show the outside world of people's feeling of their inside world.
Look for the dictionaty and see if 'show sb of sth' is a right usage.
when we talking about people who chasing a better quality living, we are not only talking about
who
(are) chasing