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Ielts writing task 2: artificial intelligence - benefits and drawbacks - opinion.

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Nov 4, 2018   #1

growing influence of artificial intelligence on our life

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Artificial intelligence is on the rise in recent years. While some people believe that it would bring considerable benefits to humans, others argue that great risks could be posed by this kind of intelligence. Personally, I am persuaded that artificial intelligence would be more beneficial rather than detrimental.

On the one hand, the fact that AI is processing rapidly could be seen as a threat to humankind. Due to its outstanding capacity of working, robots are likely to outperform humans at any cognitive tasks. Many people could, consequently, be at hazard for unemployment. For instance, doctors could lose their job as robots are more accurate and prudent at doing surgery and caring patients. Furthermore, if humans are no longer the smartest on the planet, we could not be sure whether we can continue to control the world or not.

On the other hand, Artificial Intelligence could definitely enhance humans' quality of life due to a noticeable number of advantages it offers. Firstly, it makes our life much convenient by automating everything. For example, while sitting in a self-driving car, people can either accomplish their work or take relaxation. Secondly, as AI has the ability to work ceaselessly and tirelessly with incredible speed, it can certainly boost the productivity in any field it works on. Finally, if humans are threatened with losing our occupations, they will be likely to work doggedly and thus improve their qualifications to compete with AI.

In conclusion, I believe that the positive effects offered by AI in terms of upgrading humans' living standard outweigh the disadvantages.
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Nov 4, 2018   #2
Thi, the prompt paraphrase is incorrect for this essay. You are supposed to reflect that this is a 3 point of view essay as part of the thesis statement. The correct final sentence should be:

It is important that both points of view be compared so that I can develop a personal stand regarding this topic.

What was created above is an original thesis statement that includes the full instruction of the original prompt in a manner that is highly different from the original prompt but still presents the required discussion instruction.

Due to the lacking reference phrases that gave the reader an understanding of which public point of view is being discussed, the essay comes across, from beginning to end as a personal opinion discussion. Therefore, the essay is not task accurate and will be scored based on that basis. The score will not be a passing one for this essay because of the TA failure on your part.

The reasoning is good but not properly presented. That is the main issue with this essay. Your reasoning could be helped if you learn how to use transition sentences or phrases to help the reader prepare for the change in discussion. For example; "... threat to human kind. With robots slowly taking over human jobs it is possible that these AI machines will take over..." That makes the introduction and transition from the topic sentence to the actual discussion smoother and clearer to the reader.

With enough practice and proper guidance, I know that you will begin to show improvement in your Task 2 writing. You have the ability, you just need to be guided towards that goal. That will come with time and practice.
ronia85516 10 / 20 3  
Nov 5, 2018   #3
I think your reasonings are convincing, but your topic sentences should be more objective so your 2,3 paragraph won't seem like your opinions. Also, it might be better to add a paragraph of your statement which was required in the question.

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