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IT Aspects - IT ENABLES PEOPLE TO DO THEIR WORK OUTSIDE THEIR WORKPLACE - IELTS Task 2


Maskeb 1 / 2  
Aug 3, 2019   #1
Information technology enables people to do their work outside their workplace
(e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.).
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples for your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, information technology plays such a huge role in people's domestic life. This part of technology would be an integral part of human lives. Hence, they may use IT for their works as an opportunity. They can do their works and duties without any physical presence. This issue might have negative and positive sides. The aim of this paper is to look for both sides of this issue.

At the first point, this kind of technology is a significant opportunity for reducing a lot of costs. In fact, employers could be able to manage the amount of costs in this way. Also, they can use this money in other important parts such as achieving their main targets. For one clear example, when people work in their homes, companies do not have to prepare a huge office place. Also, the rate of office costs such as paper, copier and etc. can be saved.

On the other hand, this issue has negative sides. As some experts said, if an employee does not work in the same place, it would be hard to manage their works, it means the process of handling them needs plenty of time. Hence, it would be a good reason for wasting companies' potential such as time and money. However, in the long term, it has a negative impact on the functions of companies. For instance, work together in one place, they would able to share their experiences and attitudes that it would be impossible when they work far away from each other.

In conclusion, information technology has different aspects. sometimes it would be a great opportunity and sometimes it may play an unusable role in the companies.

Winter 4 / 8 2  
Aug 7, 2019   #2
In the first paragraph, you should write the aim of the essay not the paper
In the second one, I think interpreting the reason why working at home can reduce costs and then give examples is more relevant
In the third one, what do you mean by it is a good reason. The example needs to have connection
SeyedHasan - / 2 1  
Aug 7, 2019   #3
introduction:
you wrote 3 sentences to transfer the concept of the topic but it is to some extent vogue. I suggest to just paraphrase the task like the following:

with information technology emerging, people are able to work at their homes. although this development brings drawbacks, in my opinion, it does more good than harm to society.

Information technology has provided people with the opportunity to work at their homes. while it prompts downsides, its upsides deserves more attention.

concerning body 1 or paragraph 2:
your ideas are not well supported. how it reduces the costs is not well explained. you can say the costs of mobility, or maybe drinking and eating. these are just examples.

you can also mention doing homework such as cleaning, cooking, shopping, upbringing and taking care of children.

I hope you find these comments useful.


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