IELTS Task 1: The aspects of Fairmont Island that tourists enjoy the most and the least

A survey of aspects of Fairmont Island that tourists enjoy the most and the least is displayed in the pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that local society in Fairmont Island is the most popular aspect in attracting tourists. Budgets to live there, however, appears to be the factor many tourists are not interested in.

Turning to the advantages category, 40% tourists experience the local society as the greatest advantage. Landscape of the Island, furthermore, it is the second highest benefit, representing at 37% of the travellers. Surprisingly, culture and standard of accommodation in the Fairmont Island are the least attraction for visitors, at 12% and 11% respectively.

On the other hand, the budgets to live in the Island are the significant problem which travellers have to deal with, at 45% of all respondents. After that, 30% of them do not enjoy tourist entertainments in that Island. Weather conditions are also another disadvantage holidaymakers do not like which depicting at 20% while those who dislike the quality of food only show 5%.

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