Write the essay through three paragraphs of "introduction", "body" and "conclusion. Separate each part from another one.
We can see that the general major of International Students enetering the university from Asia and some other countries like Canada, Turkey and Maxico.
revise the sentence.
In 2000, the highest number wasbelonged toin chinese students with around 55,000
highest
use synonym like "greatest", OR "the next greatest number of international students,
behind Chinese students , ..."
Then we can see other countries like Canada and
Start the sentences with more interesting transitions such as :"The charts are also indicative of the fact that...", "The charts depict..". In addition, it would be better to classify the information of the charts into two or three parts and write each part as a separate paragraph in the body.
we can see
repetition
From the second chart,
write this part as a separate paragraph..
the most popular subject is buisness and managment with a slight increase and fall in 2002 and 2003 respectively.
it is not enough to just write something increased or decreased. Use numbers to support your report. How much did it increase or decrease? For example :
"it slightly increased from xxx to xxx over xx years. However, a sharp reduction in it occurred (OR "was observed") in 2002 and 2003)."subject
use synonym such as "field of study"
The next most popular subject is engineering study with almost 80,000 in 2000 with slow growth to reach 100,000 in 2003 then with a dramatic fall in 2004 with around 60,000 students, in contrast with mathamatics and computing which rise from just under 60,000 in 2000 to be almost 70,000 in 2004.
This sentence is too long.
life science stays
use past tens.