Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to show you how to make tighter paragraphs with 2 or more thoughts included in one sentence. Compare your work with my suggestions and then revise the essay accordingly. This will be a lesson in tightening your thoughts to fit into a specific paragraph. You forgot to consider the fact that when too much homework is assigned, students no longer have time to rest even after classes. That is why some countries no longer allow teachers to assign homework on Fridays, giving students time to rest during the weekend.
One of the important criteria could be used to measure the learning of students [...] teachers to understand the educational condition of each student.
- Hamed,you are really improving :-) Even though there are still grammatical issues, you have shown that you have now learned how to include the essay prompt in the introduction in the proper way.However, you did not present an opposing view to be discussed so the essay lacks a balanced point of view. We also still need to work on the development of your thesis statement.-Teachers use homework as a way of measuring the amount of information the student has learned in class. The problem is that it often feels like there is already too much homework being assigned to students. So they spend too much time studying after school and do not really get to rest and relax their body and brain after. That is why I believe that teachers could actually be assigning too much homework.Daily homework helps studentsto be more active in both home and school.
- Hamed, not all homework assigned can be applied in daily life. Therefore, your argument about reviewing homework based on daily activities is flawed. You should choose another reason. Also, did it ever occur to you that when students receive too much homework, the student already fails to learn because he cannot concentrate long enough on one subject to actually learn and memorize it?Another advantage of assigning question to students is making a mutual relationship [...] Consequently, a teacher will have a big picture of a class.
- You have too many examples of how assignments are good for students. But that is not the only side to this issue, you need to balance it out by presenting the other side and showing the weakness of that argument so that your side can come out looking better by the end of the essay :-)To sum up, based on above reasons mentioned, [...] faults through reviewing their assignments by teachers.
- Try to find another way to close the essay aside from starting with "To sum up", that is already a generic way of summing up an essay. Try to be a little bit more creative in the way you close your essay.Overall, this is a very good try at a point of view essay. I just wish you had covered both sides of the issue in order to create a better informed and balanced essay. Your efforts are noted and commended in this particular paper :-) I hope you try to revise it so that we can see the improvement that I know you can develop with practice :-)