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Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?


hamedmas 27 / 58 19  
Sep 17, 2014   #1
Hi Dear Friend
I write an essay about a subject for the TOEFL. Please help me to correct my essay :)
Thank you in advance. :)

Essay Prompt:

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

One of the important criteria could be used to measure the learning of students is assigning daily homework. Whether teachers should assign homework or not, is the issue, which will be discussed. From my point of view, Students need to be managed by their teachers in out of school by giving them the homework, which would be helpful to understand whatever they have learnt in the school. It is not only giving the students the clear direction for the study, but help teachers to understand the educational condition of each student.

Daily homework helps students to be more active in both home and school. By doing everyday activities, students would be able to review whatever they learn in the school and find related answers which would be asked in the homework. Through it, they would be able to ask questions from parents or teachers about vague parts of their duties. The regular homework can encourage students to come up new questions about last topic in the classroom next day. In addition, being more active during the semester, help students to be more ready for the final exam.

Another advantage of assigning question to students is making a mutual relationship between teachers and students. By asking more questions about the topic, students would know how to make a strong connection with their teacher. Homework would clarify the educational condition of each student. As a matter of the fact, the ability of students to learn is different. Therefore, teachers would be able to measure student's abilities to learn by following their homework. As a result, they would know which student needs more attention. They also would be recognized that overall ability of student to learn studies is good or not. Consequently, a teacher will have a big picture of a class.

To sum up, based on above reasons mentioned, the consequence of assigning daily homework would be useful for both students and teachers. Teachers would recognize the total educational conditions of the students and students could understand their faults through reviewing their assignments by teachers.

niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Sep 17, 2014   #2
In addition, being more active during the semester helps students to be more ready for the final exam.

Another advantage of assigning question to students is making a mutual relationship between teachers and students. By asking more questions about the topic, students would know how to make a strong connection with their teacher.

In addition, giving assignments can establish strong connection between teachers and students. By the additional tasks assigned to them, students may remember and retain in mind what the teacher has discussed about the topic.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 17, 2014   #3
Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to show you how to make tighter paragraphs with 2 or more thoughts included in one sentence. Compare your work with my suggestions and then revise the essay accordingly. This will be a lesson in tightening your thoughts to fit into a specific paragraph. You forgot to consider the fact that when too much homework is assigned, students no longer have time to rest even after classes. That is why some countries no longer allow teachers to assign homework on Fridays, giving students time to rest during the weekend.

One of the important criteria could be used to measure the learning of students [...] teachers to understand the educational condition of each student.

- Hamed,you are really improving :-) Even though there are still grammatical issues, you have shown that you have now learned how to include the essay prompt in the introduction in the proper way.However, you did not present an opposing view to be discussed so the essay lacks a balanced point of view. We also still need to work on the development of your thesis statement.

-Teachers use homework as a way of measuring the amount of information the student has learned in class. The problem is that it often feels like there is already too much homework being assigned to students. So they spend too much time studying after school and do not really get to rest and relax their body and brain after. That is why I believe that teachers could actually be assigning too much homework.

Daily homework helps studentsto be more active in both home and school.

- Hamed, not all homework assigned can be applied in daily life. Therefore, your argument about reviewing homework based on daily activities is flawed. You should choose another reason. Also, did it ever occur to you that when students receive too much homework, the student already fails to learn because he cannot concentrate long enough on one subject to actually learn and memorize it?

Another advantage of assigning question to students is making a mutual relationship [...] Consequently, a teacher will have a big picture of a class.

- You have too many examples of how assignments are good for students. But that is not the only side to this issue, you need to balance it out by presenting the other side and showing the weakness of that argument so that your side can come out looking better by the end of the essay :-)

To sum up, based on above reasons mentioned, [...] faults through reviewing their assignments by teachers.

- Try to find another way to close the essay aside from starting with "To sum up", that is already a generic way of summing up an essay. Try to be a little bit more creative in the way you close your essay.

Overall, this is a very good try at a point of view essay. I just wish you had covered both sides of the issue in order to create a better informed and balanced essay. Your efforts are noted and commended in this particular paper :-) I hope you try to revise it so that we can see the improvement that I know you can develop with practice :-)


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