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IELTS Task 1: The audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.


BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 23, 2014   #1
The graph shows audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.

Generally, television has more audiences than radio. There have percentage until 45% for television audiences and until 25% for radio audiences.

From the first side, television audiences have percentage nearly 7% at 1.00 then decreased only slightly at 3.00. After that, total of audiences started increased slightly until 9.00 then increased sharply until 21.00. In 24.00, audiences of television declined dramatically until 15%.

In the other side, percentage of radio audiences only under 4% at 1.00 and leveled off until 6.00. It rose sharply until 25% at 8.00 then decrease sharply and to undergo to fluctuated slightly. After that it step by step falls but with a small increase in percentage at 16:30 to 18:00 pm. The percentage of audience then gradually goes down and at 4.00, it is the lowest which is near 2%.

To summary, these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.




Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Apr 23, 2014   #2
There have percentage until

- it is not completed!

In your intro:

The graph shows audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.

In your conclusion:

these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.

Determine whether it is singular or plural)

Hope this helps)
Apsari 7 / 20 1  
Apr 23, 2014   #3
There have percentage until 45% for television audiences anduntil 25% for radio audiences [quote=BOMAT_IRA]

From the first side, television audiences have percentage nearly 7% at 1.00(a.m or p.m) then decreased only slightly at 3.00. After that, total of audiences started increased slightly until 9.00 then increased sharply until 21.00. In 24.00, audiences of television declined dramatically until 15%.[/quote].. give the timing. it will be clearly.

In the other side,The percentage of radio audiences only under 4% at 1.00 and leveled off until 6.00. It rose sharply until 25% at 8.00 then decrease sharply and to undergo to fluctuated slightly. After that it step by step falls step by step but with a small increase in percentage at 16:30 to 18:00 pm. The percentage of audience then gradually goes down and at 4.00, it is the lowest which is near 2%.

You need to write more opinion in the conclusion. you can write 3 sentence in there.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 24, 2014   #4
Generally, television has more audiences than radio. There have percentage until 45% for television audiences and until 25% for radio audiences.

I hope you pay more attention to the structure that Pahan has suggested above. It is the most appropriate approach for this task. So, according to that the above is your Overview and in the overview you should not include any statistics or data. It should contain your main observations or trends of the graph to give an overall picture to the reader.

To summary, these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.

Unlike for IELTS TASK 2, you need not to have a conclusion for this task.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 28, 2014   #5
Unlike for IELTS TASK 2, you need not to have a conclusion for this task.

i totally agree with dumi, because you have overview in the second paragraph.

From the first side, television audiences have percentage nearly 7% at 1.00 then decreased only slightly at 3.00. After that, total of audiences started increased slightly until 9.00 then increased sharply until 21.00. In 24.00, audiences of television declined dramatically until 15%.

it tends to follow listing paragraph. i suggest you to implement comparison and contrast to infrom your detail information.
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 29, 2014   #6
To summary,these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.


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