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[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - Average Band Point of IELTS General Test for Some Different Participants


ruwchii 6 / 18 3  
Dec 14, 2014   #1
The table compares the grade points of IELTS General Test both receptive and productive skills including the overall points taken by participants from four different countries in 2010. It is noticeable that the Germany students achieved the highest overall point in the test. In addition, they also could manage to get the highest points almost in the whole skills test.

French participants were in the second position of the highest overall point of 6.7 whereas the Malay and the Indonesian participants were following closely with overall points of 6.5 and 6.4 in a row. Furthermore, the French participants did pretty well in the writing test compared to Malay and Indonesian participants. In other hand, despite Malay participant stood in the second lowest position, they hit the highest point in reading test among other country groups. Last but not least, the students' points in the whole tests stand at average level at all. The lowest point notes in writing while the highest point notes in speaking.




somasalims 15 / 27 5  
Dec 14, 2014   #2
Hi classmate! Good job! ^^

I just want to give you a little bit advice about the introduction. I think it is not clear because maybe you forgot that that is about 'average of band points'.

Then in the body, there some mistakes. I'll tell you directly. heheh (y)
immobulus 3 / 4  
Dec 15, 2014   #3
the French participants

Hy ruwchii

better don't use "The " before name of country or nationality
ayulia 3 / 8 1  
Dec 16, 2014   #4
Hi ruwchii

I think you don't have to use In other hand and despite in one sentence because they have the same meaning.
akhfan 5 / 9 3  
Dec 16, 2014   #5
French participants were in the second position of the highest overall point of 6.7 whereas the Malay and the Indonesian participants were following closely with overall points of 6.5 and 6.4 in a row.

the word "highest" is not necessary.

In On other hand, despite Malay participant stood in the second lowest position, they hit the highest point in reading test among other country groups.
Anfalia 40 / 56 23  
Dec 16, 2014   #6
hello,

that the Germany students

i think you do not need to mention "the" before Germany.

Good luck! :)

InOn other hand, despite(use appropriate linking verb "while") Malay participant stood inat(the preposition of "stood" is "at") the second lowest position,


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