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Writing Task I IELTS : Average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period


SarlindaDS_27 42 / 52 5  
Nov 20, 2016   #1
A comparison of the average of regularly day programs for Channel One News during one year period is depicted in the line graph. The ratings of channel figures are illustrated based on the number of viewers per day in millions. Overall, almost of the figures fluctuated and only the figures for the 1pm which remained fairly stable.

The figure for the 6pm News began the year at 4.8 million. It fluctuated, but the general trend was downwards until ended to just over 3 million. The figure for the 9:30pm experienced a gradual rise from 3.2 million in January to a peak of 3.8 million in May. However, this month saw the introduction of the 11pm News, and the figure for the 9:30 News plummeted, hitting a low-point of 1.1 million in August.

In the same period, the figure for the 11pm rocketed from 0.2 to 4.1 million. At this point, the trend reversed. From August onwards, the figure for the 9:30 grew steadily. Meanwhile, the figure for the 11pm News declined sharply, and in December fell under the 1 million.

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Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Nov 20, 2016   #2
... from 3.2 million in January to a [TO+ INFINITIVE(V1)] peak of [COLLOCATION PEAK=AT] 3.8 million in May.
... hitting a low-point of 1.1 million in August.
PREVIOUSLY, IN INTRODUCTION YOU HAVE MENTIONED UNIT, SO YOU DO NOT MENTIONED AGAIN IN BODY PARAGRAPH.


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