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The average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000

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Mar 21, 2018   #1

vietnamese studying overseas

The graph line illustrates how many vietnamese students studied in three different nations over the period of 15 years starting from 2000.
It is clear that while the number of Vietnamese students increase signifficantly in the US and France. The opposite was true for that in Russia. Also, The figure in the USA was highest during the period.

In 2000, there was an average of nearly 3,5 milions people studied in France, in comparison with 3 milions people in the US and only 1.5 milions people in Russia. Over the next 5 years, The number in the US decrease sharply by 1.5 millions people. In a simillar way, the 2000 - 2005 period witnessed a signifficant decline by 2 millions students in Russia. By the contrast, the figure in the USA increase slightly by over 2 millions people at the same time.

The 2005-2015 period witnessed a considerable growth in number of Vietnamese students in France, Russia and America. To be specific, the number of Vietnamese students in the USA surpassed that in Russia and France became the country with the highest Vietnamese student, approximately 5 milions, compared to 4,5 milions in France and 2,5 milions in Russia in the same period.
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Mar 22, 2018   #2
Huong, since this is a task 1 essay, I need to see the illustration yo were provided for the writing of the essay. I need to be able to compare your work with the original prompt and the information in the chart. Without it, I cannot continue to advise you regarding the problem points and strong points of your essay. While the presentation of your essay seems complete, I cannot be assured of the accuracy of the statements that you made. So this essay that you wrote is basically useless as a practice essay. All because you did not provide the image for our review. It is impossible to grant you a definitive review unless I can see what I am supposed to be reviewing for you. Sorry about that. Just remember to upload the image with your text the next time you come here for a practice essay test review.
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Mar 26, 2018   #3
This is its chart. Thanks u.

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