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The average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy


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Jul 12, 2021   #1

WRITING IELTS I - ACADEMIC task



The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams demonstrate the average proportions in each meal of three categories of nutrients.which may be harmful for health if eaten too much . They include sodium, Saturated fat, Added Sugar. They have taken the result in the United of Statue America.

In general, Sodium and Saturated Fat account for higher amounts in dinner than other meals. Besides that, The majority of Added Sugar contains in Snacks more than other typical meals.

The first chart, sodium has the highest number of nutrients in dinner ( 43%), followed by Lunch ( 29%) which has a margin over 14% . The rates of sodium in breakfast and lunch are equal ( 14%). The second chart is about Saturated fat, the minority of it has in breakfast (16%), whilst it accounts for 37% in dinner. There is a big difference between breakfast and dinner that is over 21%. However, there is not a margin over snacks and lunch respestively 21%, 26% which is only about 5%.

The last pie chart is nutrients called Added Sugar. Differently, the largest amount of it is contained in snacks with 42% while other charts have mostly the biggest number of nutrients in dinner. Through the last chart, the rates of added sugar in other typical meals in the USA is not different with respectively 16% in breakfast, 19% Snacks and 23% in dinner.
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Jul 13, 2021   #2
The writer is confusing the reader. Charts are different from diagrams. His summary is inaccurate when compared to the original presentation.Failure to simply complete a summary report based on the unspecified number of images means the writer will not complete this report within 20 minutes.

The writer also failed to identify reference errors (United Statute of America V. United STATES of America). The writer should focus on quickly offering image information with a controlled number of words, no more than 200. There needs to be immediate clarity in the information.

There is too much parenthesis usage in the essay, which led to an exaggerated amount of word usage. While variety in the presentation scores well, it needs to be balanced. Do not overuse a single format as that could lead to other presentation problems and eorors.

* Limited review due to lack of image


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