, I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing.GRAMMAR ISSUES
I suggest that you should be consistent with Subject Verb Agreement inasmuch as "people" is a plural noun and "a" is an article to singular noun.
so that it should be = people or a person
the most important
lesson which have to be taught
lesson is a singular noun so you should use "has" after which, or maybe you can change lesson to be lessons
there are also undeniable benefits of learning second
I utterly believe that "of" is not collocate with benefits, so you should change to be "for" = benefits for (you can presumably check your collocation dictionary)
to learn faster thanadult
you should put an article before "adult", or you can probably change adult to be adults / the adult (if "adult" has been mentioned in your previous sentence)
they will be easy
in remembering new vocabularies
in is not collocate with easy, you can us preposition "for" or "about" (check your dictionary)
language [quote=frt427]language in the future and also it isand also
they will be easy[/quote]
do not you think that these are redundant expressions?FLOW AND IDEA
Overall, your idea is good whereas there are several sentences which make me confused. Thus, I have some suggestion for you.
School is basic foundation of knowledge being imparted to a people. Some people consider that learning second language should be taught to children in the earliest grade. I would argue that
this has both positive and negative implications .
your idea in the first paragraph / introduction sentence is not clear. the essay question is about agree or disagree but you quote that this has positive and negative implication. Hence, I think that your idea in the first paragraph is Out Of Topic.
this my introduction sentence if I should write this :Foreign language subjects in schools have generated a great deal of discussion. for this reason, some people think that international language should be learned by students starting in the beginning level of their education as it can impact on their later development. While such an idea has alarmed a group of teachers who have taken up against the perception as they think that foreign language can decrease a sense of patriotism, I would support the argument of learning international language from the beginning inasmuch what elementary students need in this age of globalization for facing the world is learning international languages such as English, French or Germany language.
To sum up, it is clear to me that although there are advantages of learning second language in the childhood, there are also drawbacks. We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects. Although it is important of learning second language in the earliest grade, first language is still learned and used by the children .
As a matter of fact, I hate to say this but I should. your conclusion paragraph is completely Out Of Topic inasmuch as the question does not ask you about advantages and disadvantages. Nevertheless, you should put your strong argument whether you agree or disagree with the statement in the question. As far as I am concerned, your essay does not mention agree or disagree at all.
However, you can correct me if I wrong in my comments for your essay. The last comment, you should never throw in the towel to improve my writing.KEEP STUDY, KEEP SPIRIT.