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The bar chart shows amount of carbon dioxide emissions from different forms of transportation


mem77 62 / 98 6  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
The table gives information about the percentage of travelers' per-form of transport and average age of traveler. The table shows amount of carbon dioxide emissions from different forms of transportation. All in all, the most common means and causes the most pollution of transport is experienced by car-driver only.

According to the table, self driver only the most popular forms of transport, which is forty-eight percent. The second favorite means of vehicle is train or bus, which are thirty-seven percent. The least common forms of transportation is a cycle or walk, in four percent. And also at the second line of table, train or bus comes to the highest average age of travelers, on forty-seven years old. The lowest average age of passengers is cycling or walking, which is thirty-nine years old. If we make a comparison among the highest and the least mid-age of the travelers, the gap is no more than ten years old.

Based on the bar chart, self driver causes the most pollution means of transport, which is around 0,3 kilograms carbon dioxide. The second most smog is a car with more than one person, which is 0,05 kilograms carbon dioxide. The least or no pollution form of transportation is cycling or walking.




justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
Hi Muhamad, below are my thoughts on your analysis.

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There you have it Muhamad, I hope the above remarks and insights help you in your revision, one more thing, the word "travelers", does not need any apostrophe or any other punctuation mark.
Brunasingh 2 / 2  
Sep 16, 2016   #3
Start the essay paraphrasing!
Fira28 6 / 10  
Sep 19, 2016   #4
Hello mem77, here i left comment for you

• (The) table gives ==> (you can change with describes, illustrates, shows, intenses) information about the percentage ...

• All in all, (you should write overall, it can be seen that) the most common means and ...

• ...popular forms of transport, which is forty-eight percent(s) .


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