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IELTS TASK 1 - BAR CHARTS - THE HIGHEST RANKING MEDAL WINNERS BY TOP FIVE COUNTRIES


trankhai2502 1 / -  
Nov 17, 2020   #1

THE NUMBER OF OLYMPIC MEDALS WON



The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the Summer and Winter Olympics.

The first bar chart illustrates the top five nations, in the Winter Olympics, achieving the highest score in terms of medals, in particular, which are gold, silver, and bronze. Whereas, the total number of Olympics medals, which won by a range of apex countries in the Summer Season, was shown in the second bar chart.

Looking at the charts in detail, Norway, having around 370 medals, was recorded to be the leader of the winter race before disappeared from the ranking board in the Summer Olympics. Besides that, the US used to ranked 2 in the Winter Season before became the Summer Olympics champion with 2500 medals which far from the Second, Russia, with around 1800 ones. In addition, Germany still remained at the same stage in both Olympics surveyed above.

To summarise, the Summer Olympics had a much higher number of medals than the Winter Olympics. The US, Germany, and Russia remained in the top 5 highest Olympic medals quantity achieved in the Summer and Winter.



temiajare 2 / 5  
Nov 17, 2020   #2
the US used to ranked(rank) 2 in the Winter Season before became(becoming) the Summer Olympics

Consider using additional transitions where appropriate:
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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,797 4780  
Nov 18, 2020   #3
There is a need for you to understand that all the information presented in the Task 1 essay must be in summary form. Therefore, the summary overview should have indicated that there were 2 bar charts immediately. The type of medals given out, and the 2 Olympic seasons represented. The trending statement should also be indicated in the summary overview.

You must never say "To summarize" in the task 1 presentation because the overall presentation is a summary in and of itself. Only direct statements indicating the information provided should be referenced. This is not a task 2 essay so there is no requirement to summarize or conclude the presentation.


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