The bart graph illustrates information about the performance of travellers using three major airport

Aviation in the New York metropolitan area

The bart graph illustrates information about the performance of travellers using three major airports in New york city from 1995 to 2000. Overall, over the period there was a fluctuation in the number of passengers who travelled via JohnF kennedy while both LaGuardia and Newark airports experienced an upward trend.The number of airport has inclined dramatically from approximately 35 millions in 1995 to almost 48 millions in 1997. Furthermore this trend has growth to 32 millions at the last year. From 1995 to 1999 LaGuardia airport using visitors has dramatically increased from almost 35m to 50m. Now the highest visitors peaked to 70 m.on the other hand newark airport passengers from 15m in 1995 to 42m in 1998. Now this position from 1998 to 1999 the trend remained same at 42m and increased slightly at43m in 2000.

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