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IELTS:become a huge ordeal; Children learning foreign language in primary school


Serapke 8 / 14  
Jan 30, 2014   #1
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?


In today's world when people tend to travel all over the world, the knowledge of foreign language becomes of great importance. Consequently, more and more people become bilingual or even multilingual. So if foreign languages are so important in our lives, should our children start learning them at primary schools rather than secondary schools?

To begin with, children who begin to learn a foreign language at primary school have the advantage over those kids who do it at secondary school. For instance, when a child become acquainted with a foreign language in early ages like at primary school the language is learnt quicker and better as a kid gets used to the sound of a foreign language. Moreover, the sooner children begin to learn a foreign language, the sooner they can use it in his day to day life in such activities as playing computer games, watching TV or online chatting.

On the other hand, if children begin to learn a foreign language at primary schools, the actual danger arises to the country's native language. For example, English starts to overwhelm mother-tongue in Lithuania. Therefore, the majority of teenagers and young adults in my homeland tend to use English instead of informal Lithuanian language. Furthermore, young children are not so motivated to learn, in general. They have no responsibility to learn new things. Henceforth, a foreign language might not be interesting for young children to learn.

On the whole, knowing a language is quite necessary skill these days. Yet, trying to learn it in a childhood might become a huge ordeal. Nevertheless, from my own experience I agree that learning a language at primary school is very beneficial practice, which should be encouraged.

wizdeep 1 / 5  
Jan 30, 2014   #2
good points strong arguments
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 30, 2014   #3
In today's world when people tend to travel all over the world, the knowledge of foreign language becomes of great importance.

It is not only about traveling around the world, it is also about doing business with other countries, studying abroad etc. that require communication between nations. This is a good sentence, but it would have been nicer if you broadened its scope.
indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Jan 31, 2014   #4
start learning them at primary schools rather than secondary schools

this could be start learning them from primary schools?

To begin with

it is commonly used to explain a process or situation, you can use other adv such as commonly, generally.

foreign language

... too much repetition.

For instance, when a child become acquainted with a foreign language in early ages like at primary school the language is learnt quicker and better as a kid gets used to the sound of a foreign language.

because it is an example, you should give the detail example, and you can mention English as an example of foreign language
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 31, 2014   #5
So if foreign languages are so important in our lives, should our children start learning them at primary schools rather than secondary schools?

Rather than asking the same question that your prompt poses, it is good if you tell the reader what position you take on that argument. Follow Pahan's suggestion for constructing your intro.

To begin with, children who begin to learn a foreign language at primary school level have the advantage over thosethe kids who do it at secondary school.

For instance, when a child becomes acquainted with a foreign language in early ages like at primary school(sounds repetitive) the language iscan be learnt quicker and better as a kid gets used to the sound of a foreign language
indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Jan 31, 2014   #6
Furthermore, young children are not so motivated to learn,in general .

... I have no idea of this sentence for

Anyways, your conclusion is quite good, but I think in the second and third paragraph are still in general meaning.
It might be better if you give the detail by example.
Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Jan 31, 2014   #7
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

I'm little bit confuse with the question .. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
I think you just mention the advantages and advantages without answer the question, isn't it?
Let me know about your thought.. :)


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