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I believe the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime


Adamtong 9 / 32 2  
Sep 30, 2014   #1
Do you agree or disagree with following statement: the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime

My grandmother always says to us at dinner table that, she would never imagine one day, there is no need to worry about food any more, a huge problem to their generation when she was young. Hunger and poverty are the most important problems for her generation and it seems totally solved today. This story makes me feel confident about problems we are facing today.

Admittedly,some problem are hard to solve. Confidence to solve a problem often loses before temptation fails. However, the truth is a lifetime is quite a long time and we can make a difference.It is a shame that after a lifetime we are still troubled by the same problems we faced with when we were young and didn't even give it a try to solve it. After a special period in China, people like my grandmother suffering deeply from poverty and hunger, but at the meantime, instead of blaming everything to societies and governments, they struggled to conquer the difficulties. Modern techniques were imported to modernize relatively primitive agriculture, farmers were trained using machines and experts were encouraged to do researches in agriculture refining skills. Patience is not a easy thing, but after a generation-time, my grandmother can proudly tells me her story about hunger and, more importantly, the way they change the situation and the fact the happy life we have today contributes to the efforts of their generation.

There are some problems troubling our society nowadays. Inequity, corruption, disease, etc. Losing faith seems make sense sometimes. However, the truth is, there are always some people struggling in that problems and making things right. Say corruption. After Pres. Xi comes into power, many actions of anti-corruption are adopted and many cases about participation in illegal activities are revealed and punished. People are surprised by the big change, after all, 2 years ago, they were complaining about the abusing privileges by administrative staff. This seems the same story as my grandmother's, just different version in different time.

Considering either stories happened in the past or the events we are experiencing nowadays, we can see problems are being solved or solved. Yes, I believe a lifetime is long enough to witness a huge miracle happens; I believe the human is creative and wise enough to make difference; I believe we are young enough to contribute to our society; So I believe the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime.

Ischa 1 / 3  
Sep 30, 2014   #2
just use those problem become a tools to be near with God
texasbreed13 3 / 13 2  
Sep 30, 2014   #3
Hey I think you have a well written essay. You were able to back up your standpoint with personal accounts, however I feel at the end you could expand on how you think the said problem can be solved a little more. Giving your personal input on how the problem could be solved is essentially the second half of what the prompt is asking for. But great essay overall.
restinpizza 7 / 15  
Sep 30, 2014   #4
My grandmother always says to us change says to said

In the first sentence, the punctuation is all over the place and it's hard to ascertain what you're trying to say. Try rewording it.


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