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My beloved mother! Good housewife and cook.


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Mar 22, 2015   #1
About my beloved mother, her name is Duc, she is 40 years old. She has long black hair and black eyes. She has a small nose and her smile's similar with me.

My mother is a good housewife. She's very good at cooking. I love the food which is cooked by my mom, especially her chicken soup. It's so yummy.

She loves communicating with different people with honest and tender smile, therefore, she has many close friends.
My mother is a traditional woman who loves her children wholeheartedly and patiently. She is not only my mother but also the guide of my path, the path of my life. [...]
btrfly7 - / 15 6  
Mar 23, 2015   #2
Hello Maryla! This essay is very clear and descriptive. You should try starting your essay with "My mother is a traditional woman who loves her children wholeheartedly and patiently" and then follow-up with additional details about your mother. The second paragraph details a more personal connection you have with your mother. So you may want to begin it by stating "My mother is not just a traditional mother, but she means very much to me." Then you can list the supporting sentences of "why" she means so much to you. Good going here!
lynzee22 - / 90 37  
Mar 23, 2015   #3
hello,
good start. I have made some grammatical corrections below


About my beloved mother,- her name is Duc, she is 40 years old.

She has long black hair and black eyes. She has a small nose and her smile'sis similar with meto mine .

She's very good at cooking. I love the food which is cooked by my mommy mom cooks , especially her chicken soup.

She loves communicating with different people with a honest and tender smile, t. T herefore, she has many close friends.

She is not only my mother but also themy guide of my path, the path of my life.

I can share a lot of things with her which includes my personal problems , my studyies and so on.

She always gives me advices , and raises my spirits and t. T hat's reason why I love her very much and she's very important in my life.


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