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The most beneficial discovery in last 100 years - internet invention; many impacts


sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 24, 2014   #1
Today's contemporary world is formed by myriad invention and discoveries in various sectors. However, internet invention is proven to be most beneficial for the world. It has change life of the people in my city too in many ways and became efficient source of knowledge. Internet is helping my city to operate rapidly and efficiently.

Internet has impacted educational industries phenomenally. It has made learning easy and facilitate many educational bodies for launching online courses. Due to this, education rate has increased as well as working people are motivated to study further. In India, Symbiosis University offer's wide range of online master courses, one of my friend is working for one of the prominent retail chain since five year, is currently pursuing Mba in retail management from the same university to gain better prospect.

In India internet was not commonly used by people due to unawareness and economic factors. However today it is used widely by my nation's populace. It has given all together different diversion to shopping channels by promoting online shopping. It made purchasing immensely convenient; from household stuff to luxuries houses. Internet is used in schools and colleges for teaching purpose. Students, companies and professionals are getting enormous information for their projects. Submitting applications and payment of bills is now mechanical and hassle free.

Easy excess to internet has also boosted industries associated with it such as mobile companies. Inexpensive availability of internet helped these companies to launch smart phones and served attractive benefits to them. People in my countries are more aware today then before few decades. Government in many state of India is training government officials for using internet to carry out their task effectively and in time. Police department will be soon using software supported by internet for lodging the crime complains.

All the discoveries has their distinct contribution in constructed this better world. However internet has effected all field and changed the prospects of life. It has made life convenient, comfortable and luxurious.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 25, 2014   #2
Today's contemporary world

If you use "today's", "contemporary" becomes redundant.

What discovery in last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country?

The prompt asks you about the most beneficial discovery in the last 100 years. However, your essay is about the Internet, which is an invention. As far as I'm concerned, their meanings are not similar:

- Discovery is finding out or figuring out something that already exists.
- Invention is using objects that preexist to create something new that is first of its kind.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Mar 25, 2014   #3
Well, this confusion arises due to the reason that you have not included your prompt here. If we get the chance to look at it, then we would know what it expects from you.

The Internet has impacted educational industriesthe field of education phenomenally. It has made learning easyeasier and facilitated many educational bodies for launching online courses. Due to this, educationratethe numbers of people receiving education has increased as well as working people are motivated to study further. In India, Symbiosis University offer'soffers wide range of online master courses, one. One of my friends is working for one of the prominent retail chain since five year, is currently pursuing Mba in retail management from the same university to gain better prospect.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 25, 2014   #4
In India, the Internetinternet was not commonly used in the past by people due to unawareness and economic factors. However today it is used widely by my nation's populace.the Indians. It has given all together different diversionimpacted our society a lot be itto shopping channels by promoting online shoppingeducation, administration and so forth.
OP sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 25, 2014   #5
Well, this confusion arises due to the reason that you have not included your prompt here. If we get the chance to look at it, then we would know what it expects from you.

What discovery in last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Using specific reasons and examples to support your idea.

'Dumi, I have rescheduled my exams as i don't want to take sec chance.
Dumi i have a question - what would be the score of my essay approx. I heard that more no. of words will help student to gain more marks.

I want to know this so that i would prepare accordingly.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 11, 2014   #6
Dumi, I have rescheduled my exams as i don't want to take sec chance.
Dumi i have a question - what would be the score of my essay approx. I heard that more no. of words will help student to gain more marks.
I want to know this so that i would prepare accordingly.

Well, I am not giving scores for your essays because I truly do not have any such experience. However, I can help you aligning your essay with something that can earn a very good score. About the word count, you need to meet at least the minimum word count requirement. In my view, more than the number of words, your essay needs better presentation in terms of structure, facts, grammar and flow. :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 12, 2014   #7
'Dumi, I have rescheduled my exams as i don't want to take sec chance.
Dumi i have a question - what would be the score of my essay approx. I heard that more no. of words will help student to gain more marks.
I want to know this so that i would prepare accordingly

Yes,as dumi says it is the contents and presentation matter more than the word count (however, you should meet the minimum word count) I feel you have a good understanding about he structure by now because you wrote so many essays to practice for this task. The only point I can stress is that you should try to convey your ideas clearly. Do not give priority to display your vocabulary knowledge by compromising on clarity of your ideas.


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