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Beneficial relaxation. Learning vacation is a new kind of holiday


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Aug 31, 2016   #1
Learning vacation has a new concept to provide a different experience. It prefers to spend the time by learning something new rather than spending vacation time on a beach. The participators are able to enjoy a broad type of the travel such as join a prehistorical obeservation, study a biodiversity in the rain forest. Although at first the learning vacation was popular for young people who were still in school. Nowdays, it has been more prevalent for adult. Financing of arts school has become a good preference to spend the learning vacation. The participants will directly acquire the guidance of specialist. Britain also accept the adult travelers to join few days course throughout the country. The upside of the vacation is more economical than tradisional vacation because the travelers can arrange the trip by themselves without involving travel agent. There are many posibilities of learning vacation, so you can choose appropiate with your wish.

Naoki28 10 / 18 2  
Aug 31, 2016   #2
... join a prehistorical obeservation, studying a biodiversity in the rain forest . Although at first , although the learning vacation (...) who were still in school firstly .
... so you can choose appropiate appropriate with your wish.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 31, 2016   #3
Aris. I saw you frequently uploaded your writing but did not write the link of your article. It will help the readers to review your way to paraphrase sentences. On the one side, please, you review my corrections below.

Learning A vacation has a new concept ...
... type of the travel such as joinING a prehistorical obeservation OBSERVATION AND studyING a biodiversity in the rain forest. Although at firstthe learning THE vacation IN THE FIRST TIME was popular (...) who were still in A school. NowAdays, it has been more prevalent for AN adult. Financing FINANCE of arts schoolS has become a good preference to spend the learning THE vacation.

... acquire the guidance of A specialist. Britain also acceptS the adult travelers to join A few days (You should distinguish when using A few and Few) course throughout the country.

... more economical than THE tradisional TRADITIONAL vacation because (...) without involving THE travel agent. There are many posibilities POSSIBILITIES of learning THE vacation, so you can choose appropiateLY with your wish.

Please, review my suggestions previously. I hope you have not fallen the same condition.
I am looking forward to reading your next writing.
GOOD LUCK
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Aug 31, 2016   #4
It prefersmeans/aims to spend the time by learning ...
... enjoy a broad type of the travel such as join a prehistorical obeservation , study a biodiversity [concern on countable or uncountable kind of noun] in the rain forest. Although at first the learning vacation was popular (...) = Altough S+V, S+VNowdays , it has been ...

... acquire the guidance of the specialist. Britain also acceptS the adult travelers to join a few days course ...
The upside of the this vacation is that it is more economical thantradisionalvacationone because the travelers can arrange ...
There are many posibilities of learning vacation, so you can choose appropiate with your wish.

*pay attention on the using of article
*misspelling issue
rian31 14 / 22  
Aug 31, 2016   #5
hai aris
I want to try examine your essay
I have some suggestions for you

1. I think it is nice topic to discuss but I am still confuse to understand your essay. Especially for this sentence "Financing of arts school has become a good preference to spend the learning vacation".

2. there are some mistakes for your vocabularies


... a new concept to provide a different experience.
... than spending vacation time on athe beach.
... such as join a prehistorical obeservationobservation , study a biodiversity in the rain forest.
s]Nowdays Nowadays , it has been more ...
Financing of arts school has become a good preference to spend the learning vacation .
... is more economical than tradisionaltraditional vacation because the travelers ...
... so you can choose appropiateappropriate with your wish.

keep writing


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