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Ielts task 2: Benefits and drawbacks of having several careers.


Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Apr 13, 2014   #1
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:

The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Answer:

In our culture there is a proverb "For a person, even 70 crafts is not enough". Indeed, nowadays this proverb is being implemented all over the world. As a result, every person is trying to have several careers and several sources of earning money. Simultaneously, education is becoming something, which lasts throughout life. Personally, I agree with the proverb and support several-career lifestyle.

To begin with, the more careers you have, the more money you get. In this sense, you'll have more opportunity to provide your family financially and give better education to your children, because good education costs a lot of money. For example, if you have a single career, you will be good at a single field of life. But, several careers will help you to be universal and have multiple knowledge.

Further and even more importantly, several-career lifestyle will help to wider your outlook. For example, during work time, a person will meet a lot of people and communicate with them. As a result, a person will start to liberalize and think out of box. In this sense, the person with several jobs will have more opportunity to wider his/her horizons.

However, some people claim that the person with more than 1 job will not have enough time for a family. But I would argue that such stereotype is suitable for ancient times, because at that times people worked whole day and whole week. However, nowadays people have more spare time after work and can easily maintain several employments.

By way of conclusion, it is my strong believe that the benefits of several-career lifestyle outweigh its drawbacks, because it makes easier to supply family and makes our mindsets wider.

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niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Apr 13, 2014   #2
you'll

you will . Avoid contraction.

several-career lifestyle will help you to wider your outlook

1 job

one job

because at that times

it is my strong believe belief

or simply write, "I strongly believe.."

Note:It seems that you write well. Apart from what I have edited above, I cannot find any grammatical mistakes so far.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 13, 2014   #3
In our culturelanguage there is a proverb "For a person, even 70 crafts isare not enough"

Indeed, nowadays this proverb is being implemented all over the world.

.... this is a very poor sentence. Better remove it :(
Now you should introduce the background of the issue. Simply rephrase your prompt and present it clearly.


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