This is a multiple point of view and comparison discussion. It is unfortunate that youdid not use the required paragraph presentation. Your focus was only on your personal point of view when the requirement was to
DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND STATE YOUR OPINION.
So the presentation required a focus on the following, within 3 reasoning paragraphs:
- hosting an international sports event is good for the country
- some people think it is bad.
- STATE YOUR OPINION.
The first 2 paragraphs require an explanation ofthe public reasons based on assumed information on your end. Use of thirdand first person pronouns would be useful in increasing your GRA score.Your discussion is incomplete and doesn't offer the needed explanations based on the original requirements. The restatement is already a failure due to the inaccuracy of your paraphrasing. The selective discussion you chose to write about will result in a non-passing final score as your overall discussion is incomplete and therefore, not within minimum word requirements.