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what are benefits of shopping online.


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Oct 21, 2013   #1
Shopping online is one of the greatest aspect of the internet today. By choosing to shopping online people will be able to enjoy many benefits, some of them are saving time, variety and price.

Firstly, shopping online can help people save their time. when people so busy and don not have any time to go shopping, shopping online is so convenient for them. People only choose goods they want and order them, in a short time it will be moved to people. Moreover, people can shopping online any time they want or they have freetime without depend on the opening time and closing time of shop, so people can save the time for shopping to do they works.

Formal shop have a limited space, so the number of good is also. Sometimes people can not find a good, which they prefer and they must to come to many different shops to find it. However, in online shop, people can choose any good they want or prefer in only one shop. The number of good in online shop is so variety and more, beside online shop always update new types of good, which people can not find in normal shops.

The price of goods in online shop is lower than formal shop. Because formal shop must hire space to business so the price of goods in it are high, online shop do not need to hire space they only need to create a webside to advertise their goods, its so simple and not waste much money, beside they do not waste money to rent employee, so the price is suitable with customer and not too high.

In conclusion, shopping online have more benefits for people, it help people save their time, their money and goods in online shop are so variety and its very convenient for people.

dumi 1 / 6,929 1592  
Oct 21, 2013   #2
What is the purpose of this writing? Is it for IELTS, TOEFL etc.? It's better you mentioned the purpose so that we can align our comments with those task requirements.

one of the greatest aspect

One of the greatest aspects

some of them are saving time, variety and price.

.... some of them are saving time, having more variety and obtaining the best price deals.

whenWhen people so busy and don not have any time to go shopping

.. don't forget the very basic, but the golden rule of starting sentences with capital letters in essay writing. :D
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Oct 21, 2013   #3
Formal shop have a limited space, so the number of good is also

Formal shops have only limited space and so do the goods they sell.

Sometimes people can not find a good, which they prefer and they must to come to many different shops to find it.

Sometimes, when people cannot find what they intend to buy , they have to pay visits to several shops physically to find it.

However, in online shop, people can choose any good they want or prefer in only one shop

However, with online shopping, sellers do not have limitations with physical goods storage and the buyers too can instantly locate the shops where they need to buy their specific items.
OP bixanh 1 / 1  
Oct 21, 2013   #4
Thank you! The purpose of it for IELTS.


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