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IELTS:best way to make new friends?sports, community activities or travelling?


colin 23 / 48 15  
Dec 22, 2012   #1
Which way do you think is the best way for a student to make new friends? Joining a sports team, b. participating in community activities, or traveling。

Nowadays, students have various methods to meet new friends. While I accept that students can easily make friends through sports games and travelling, I believe that taking part in community activities is the best way for students to make friends.

On the one hand, sports provides students with opportunities to play with friends who have similar interests. Each player can build a strong relationship with others by playing within a same team, although a student has to be really good at a particular sport. In terms of taking a trip, we have seen that students can meet a wide variety of friends during a long journey. For example, in a tour bus, students can make friends with other passengers ranging from businesspeople to university professors. Although travelling is a good way to meet new friends, it is unaffordable for most students due to its time-consuming and expensive.

However, students have lots of chances to make a wider scope of friends in various community activities, including the Christmas party and community services. For example, by working together in a Christmas party, students are more easily build solid bonds with other participators, compared with in a highly competitive football game. Furthermore, students are more likely to make healthy friends in community activities, which can prevent students from falling into criminal and undesirable activities such as drug-taking and teenager-sex. Lastly, community activities can be both entertaining and engaging, which offer students a better setting to start a conversation with a good friend.

From what has been discussed, it seems that participating in community activities is a best choice for students because these activities provide youths with a wider range of friends, more good friends and a better surrounding.

dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
Dec 22, 2012   #2
Good Introduction :)

sports provides students

... sports provide students / sport provides students

although a student has to be really good at a particular sport

... although is not the appropriate word for this idea. It is "However"
However, a student requires certain talents to engage in sports.

However, students have lots of chances to make a wider scope of friends in various community activities,including the Christmas party and community services.

... sounds better without that part.

Once again a good essay! : )
YanSun 4 / 7 3  
Dec 22, 2012   #3
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we have seen that students can meet a wide variety of friends during a long journey. For example, in a tour bus, students can make friends with

I suggest that you could use a variety of expression in 'making friend':

E.G)
make friends with sb.;
be friends with;
become a companion to sb.;
get into company with sb;
cultivate friendship with;
form friends with;
keep friends with

Good day!

Peter


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