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It is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one


ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Mar 26, 2014   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.

It is undeniable that specializing in knowledge is a popular topic which has caused heated debate over a long period of time and it is an important issue because it affects everybody in his/her daily lives. When it comes to this issue, some people believe that it is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. On the contrary, some other people maintain the opposite view. In my opinion, it is better to have a wide range of academic knowledge and I will elaborate why I agree with the statement and give reasons and explanations.

One reason for my opinion is that if we have broad knowledge of many academic subjects, we will be able to examine and find our talents. If we focus on only one thing, we will not be able to identify our unknown talents and abilities in other fields. If we broaden our knowledge about more subjects, we will find more talents in ourselves. For example, if our major is math, by studying other materials like art, we might find out that we are talented at painting. In addition, if we experience finance, we might realize that we are good at financial and monetary analyses. As you can see, having a lot of knowledge about different academic subjects leads to discover our talents and interests.

Another reason why I based my opinion on is that we gain a comprehensive insight by having a wide range of knowledge of academic materials. For instance, suppose our major is psychology which is about individuals' behaviours. Studying psychology books is a good way of knowing humans but is not enough because human beings have other aspects that should be taken into consideration. To clarify, we should also consider their social traits or their behaviours in social contexts in order to know them better. For this, we need to study another subject like sociology and learn at least its basics. Thus, experiencing new subjects can help us have a better insight into understanding various phenomena.

To sum up, depending on personal experience, personality type, and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes towards this issue. However, when it comes to me, I believe that it is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject because it leads to identify our talents and also helps us to gain a comprehensive insight.

Misnariah Idrus 19 / 35 4  
Mar 26, 2014   #2
(1)
"Another reason why I based my opinion on is that we gain a comprehensive insight by having a wide range of knowledge of academic materials"

I think you should analyze the meaning of this sentence and make it sure that it has represented the information you want to deliver.

(2)
The usage frequency of "education" is too high. You should find out its synonym or other phrases which can represent your idea.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 26, 2014   #3
To sum up, depending onpersonal experience, personality type, and emotional concern , people differ greatly in their attitudes towards this issue.

.... avoid shopping listing in your formal writing makes your essay more mature. :D
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 26, 2014   #4
It is undeniable that specializing in knowledge is a popular topic which has caused heated debate over a long period of time and it is an important issue because it affects everybody in his/her daily lives.

This is pretty weak as a hook. You need a strong hook which is more catchy and meaningful to open your essay so that it would grab readers' attention towards your writing :(

In my opinion, it is better to have a wide range of academic knowledge and I will elaborate why I agree with the statement and give reasons and explanations.

The latter part is not adding any value to your essay. The reader anyway expects you to defend your position :)
OP ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Mar 26, 2014   #5
Why don't you guys pay attention to my essay's content? The body paragraph is the most important part.
andial 21 / 48 3  
Mar 26, 2014   #6
ramshah...

please consider eddies' analyses regarding your essay.

subject because it leads to identify our talents and also helps us to gain a comprehensive insight.

I think that your statement ... gain a comprehensive insight... to support your opinion is still debatable. Knowing that to get comprehensive insight about something , it is better to focus on 1 subject only :-)


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