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It's better to enjoy your money save it for the future? Family-Fixed Income

aisha2014 1 / -  
Mar 18, 2014   #1
Nowadays, money become very important tool to live in the globe . Earning money become easy for some people so they can save for future. While it is difficult for others .In this essay I will write about the reasons and my personal statement will be given before conclusion traced.

We must acknowledge that money significant for delay need. Any person has family should have at least fix income to help his member to survive. Nothing free recently we have to pay for everything. For example, food, education, health and other essential needs .

In addition, looking to the factors of spending money, many people love traveling therefore they have to spend more for this hobbit. And they prefer spending money and enjoying my life instead of saving for unknown future . Add to this some people spend their money in buying expensive cars. Moreover, luxury house.

Nevertheless, we have some other people who believe in future .They always keep saving for unexpected expenses .let's face it, high percentage of people faced some difficultly in their health when they grow up in their age. So they are need money for treatment .Some are saving for their kind schools expenses and other needs.

In my point of view and personal experience, I have balance between spending money and saving it .Because both of them required to be in save side.

To sum up, people should put in their consideration that spending money good thing for current situation to cover their needs. However they have to learn saving for future to manage all unexpected expenses.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 18, 2014   #2
Well, it is also better if you included the prompt in your essay for us to read. Then we exactly know what it is expecting from you. I guess this essay is Agree/ Disagree type.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 31, 2014   #3
A few details from this essay:
1. Here is a short note you deal with IELTS: the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read.

Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.

2. Logon to EF
On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum",
Find and select your essay file on the "-Select Forum-" screen and click on "WRITING FEEDBACK".
On the screen that says "Subject - MUST be descriptive, original, and meaningful!", write IELTS/TOEFL with the keywords (Max. 50 characters)
Finally, copy and paste your Essay into the Message box. You are asked to complete the full prompt with your essay.
As your readers, we need the full prompt which helps us crystallize the ideas from your writing, to give relevant and reliable feedback.

3. Read as many IELTS/TOEFL writings and authentic texts as you can to improve your writing skills. This help you find some ideas and improve your vocabulary and grammar.

Hope this helps :D

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