Hi, The essay looks good. I have some suggestions that u can find them below:
study Engilsh is in an English speaking conntry.
do not copy the topic
In reality, more and more students now have an intention of going abroad to study especially in developed countries country such as U.S, USA or Australia
What is the difference between this sentence and the previous one. Do not repeat the ideas.
This can help students remarkably improve their English
remarkably, particularl y in listening and speaking skills inover a relative short time because when pupils live in a foreign country, they will have chances to communicate in English with people all the time at school as well as at home.
this sentence is too long. Therefore, I deleted some parts of it with intent to make it shorter.
In the same way, they will able to speak the language more confidently and fluently ---->This statement is not different from the previous sentence; Repetition!!!
dependable or undependable??
Finally, studying abroad can
When you use "Finally" it means that this is the final paragraph. It would be better to say "the last/final positive aspect", for example.
Finally, studying abroad can be students to build up a strong and reliable character. Students are able to learn to be independent of parents and to live by their own. Moreover, they have chances to become self-motivated, autonomous and willing to embrace challenges. Consequently, they can cope with any situations and problems they encounter.
Give an example to support what you claimed here. How do they learn to be independent of their parents? How does living abroad may influence the students' character?
to leave their familiesAdd a conclusion at the end of each paragraph in the body.