Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 5

Would it be better if more good news was reported? - IELTS


el_lee88 3 / 5  
Dec 4, 2014   #1
IELTS - News editors decide what to broadcast. Would it be better if more good news was reported?

Media is commercial foundation. So, how much time will be media product viability it has been defined by the market. Editors are interested in media product stay on the market during a long time. For this reason, they provide auditory news, which is common and suitable for all time. It is a reason why we give information about wars, revolutions and other disruptions. In fact, auditory defines what editor shows them. There is one simple principle, if is demand, there is giving, too. It is the one the most major factor what impacts on the editor's decision.

As I mentioned global interesting theme is war. So, we give negative and bad news permanently. We are listening to endless news about East wars, demonstrations in Egypt, Syria. From my point of view, to reach goals and increase circumstance is easily by this way. An editor needs themes which will bring more viewers. Gradually, the media came out of human interest and it had converted as mass production.

If the editors think of, about population and they will report more good news, and also if they would not be oriented to strain the situation artificially, watching or reading newspaper and TV would be more pleasant for us. And also, in my opinion media must be oriented on human development and give them more positive than negative.

tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Dec 4, 2014   #2
It seems to me that you need work hard to improve your writing essay. In IELTS writing task 2, you have to write 250 words and beyond. Moreover, the layout of your writing is one of the important aspect and the common patter is of introduction (restate the question and thesis statement); 2 OR 3 body paragraphs (in body paragraph you have to elaborate the information further what you state in the thesis statement specifically); conclusion (restate of your thesis statement). Read many sample answer as much as you can.

IELTS - News editors decide what to broadcast. Would it be better if more good news was reported?

write your question completely to help reader easy pointing out the task and flow of your essay.

Let me try to write introduction paragraph:
News is a window of the worldwide. For this reason, headline news has to be decided by news editors to impart accurate information for the readers. However, there is a question whether news agency has to report credible news or vice versa. While this opinion becomes debatable, I strongly believe that information should be source of knowledge.
OP el_lee88 3 / 5  
Dec 4, 2014   #3
Thank you very much! I'll foresee your remarks in other essay.
rhino 3 / 4  
Dec 5, 2014   #4
perhaps, you need to improve your grammar first because as long as I read your essay that you have several grammatical error. for one sentence, you need independent clause and dependent clause because in your sentence has 3 or 4 verbs without connector. for example,

And also to sum up, in my opinion media must be oriented on to human development and give(s) them more positive than negative.
OP el_lee88 3 / 5  
Dec 5, 2014   #5
thank you, for the useful comments.


Home / Writing Feedback / Would it be better if more good news was reported? - IELTS