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Better to watch a movie in a cinema or at home? an TOEFL


lqy 1 / -  
Mar 27, 2011   #1
some peopel thinl watching movie in a cinema is better. other think watching movies at home is better. which do youprefer

Nowadays, many people prefer watching movie in a cinema. They believe that the cinema has a better atmosphere to enjoy the movie. However, from my perspective, people who watch movie at home are indeed happier and freer than people who choose the cinema.

People who watch movie at home are more comfortable. Contrary to the fact that you have to book the ticket in advance in order to have a better position, there is no need for people at home to worry about the ticket. They can enjoy movie at any time they want, and at any position they like. There is the possibility that they can watch movie at midnight or at six o`clock in the morning. What `s more, people who prefer watching movie at home wouldn`t have to face any traffic problem. No people want to spend the same time on the way they go to the cinema and watching movie. I believe that the comfort at home is so appealing and admirable for people.

People who watch movie at home have more freedom. Understandably, in the cinema, we cannot go outside and do something personal because movie don`t wait us. Especially in some high- speed movie, if we miss part of the movie, we may are not able to understand the movie. Another problem is cinema just provide snake such as pop corn or Coca-cola. That is really simple. However, we would not have to worry about them. First, we are free at home. We can pause the movie any time we want in order to do other things, or even can we repeat part of the movie when we confuse about some details. Then we have more choices on snakes too such as fruit and cake. There is the possibility to watch movie during the dinner. Suffer with much more limitation; people who go to cinema are not so free compared with who stay at home.

Admittedly, most expert consider that cinema provide the best condition for watching movie. However, with the good equipment at home, we still have the chance to appreciate the movie.

As far as I am concerned, watching movie is relaxed. Cinema may just provide a best condition to watch movie not the best way to enjoy the movie. I insist that watching movie at home is better.
Nesreen 15 / 41  
Mar 27, 2011   #2
Such amazing piece of writing ...I really congratulate you of the way that you have in writing!!
However, you have a tiny mistake which is:
we may are not be able to understand the movie.

May I ask you, how long have you written such an essay???
Well done!!!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 29, 2011   #3
Nowadays, many people prefer watching movies in a cinema.

They believe that the cinema has a better atmosphere to enjoy the movie. ---I guess I think that is true...

Wow, you write very well, and I guess you changed my mind! At first I disagreed with you, but now I think you're right.

I believe that the comfort at home is so appealing and admirable for people.----admirable is not the best word to use here. It means something different. Appealing is a great word here, though.

Use "a"-----> There is the possibility to watch a movie during dinner. ---but you do not need "the" with dinner.

Awesome!! You are great.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 24, 2011   #4
Quanue, do you notice this great idea from Mahrou? It is a simplification:
here is the possibility that t They can watch movie at midnight or at six o`clock in the morning.

That makes the sentence easier for the reader, and when you give the reader fewer words to interpret the reader's EXPERIENCE of your writing is intensified.

:-)


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