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It is better for young students to learn English with Vietnamese teachers than native teachers

tranphuongnhi 3 / 5  
Jun 27, 2019   #1
Hello everyone! I'm a new member... Could you check my essays?

study new language with native or local trainers?

It is said that learning with Vietnamese teachers is better than native teachers for students because Vietnamese students can ask Vietnamese teachers easily. But as for me, I disagree with this statement because native teachers help students study more effective than Vietnamese ones.

First of all, students who study with native teachers get standard knowledge. In terms of language knowledge, native teachers certainly have a superior level. Their English knowledge is the dream of all Vietnamese teachers who teach English. In addition, they are trained in pedagogical skills at prestigious universities in the world and they have an opportunity to get access to modern and advanced educational methods. Hence, students can be assured when studying with native teachers.

On top of that, native trainers have a comfortable teaching way. Students are not forced to write much, they only need to listen attentively and carefully. Native teachers always combine playing with studying. For instance, when participating in an English class taught by native ones, they will hold a game that involves lessons before starting them. Or pupils are admitted to play English games after classes to review their vocabulary and improve their memory. This studying method is very useful without time - consuming.

Lastly, pupils have more knowledge about the native teachers' country and culture. If we have any intention of speaking English with foreigners and in foreign countries, we not only study grammar, and speaking and listening skills, but we also know their culture. To understand clearly the knowledge and culture, native teachers can help us. As an illustration, a student learns with an American teacher and he plans to travel to the USA, he can ask his teacher about America and its culture. When being asked about the country, native teachers always talk in detail. Hence, students are able to improve English skills and know American culture.

In short, learning with native teachers is such a fantastic way that students can improve their knowledge considerably. Therefore, if have an opportunity to study with native trainers, we should get it.
solivagant 8 / 15 6  
Jun 27, 2019   #2
Hi @tranphuongnhi
I hope my feedback will be useful for you.
I think you can join together the second and the third paragraph under "qualification reason". You`ve used similar ideas in them. For example, you`ve mentioned "methods" in the second paragraph ("... to get access to modern and advanced educational methods") and it is also the central idea of the next paragraph. So, combining them may be a good idea.

And you should try to avoid repetition as much as possible.

And here are some corrections:
... study more effectively than ...
... is very useful without time - consuming and timesaving.
but we can also know gain an insight into their culture
To understand ... and culture, Native teachers can help us to get a grasp on the culture

Good luck to you!
OP tranphuongnhi 3 / 5  
Jun 27, 2019   #3
Hello @solivagant
thank you for giving me feedback
luna21 2 / 1 1  
Jun 28, 2019   #4
I think your essay is well written, I would make the following changes.

... teachers get acquire standard knowledge.

... trainers have a comfortable ...

... is very useful without being time consuming.

Synonyms for teacher:
1. professor.
2. instructor.
3. educator.
4. docent.
5. pedagog.
6. coach.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Jun 28, 2019   #5
Hello there!

Welcome to the forum. I hope that you find substantial feedback here that you're looking for.

Firstly, I find that your writing is quite cluttered in terms of structure and flow. Try to streamline your usage of words. Try to evade repetitive words and phrases. Trying to seek for alternatives will always benefit you in the long-run because you'll be able to focus more on the general outlook of your content rather than having repeatedly synonymous sentences that do not create depth. Remember to add only lines that truly add value to your content. If they cannot accomplish this, then evade their usage at all costs as it will not positively benefit you.

Observe your third paragraph. You had quite a messy approach when it comes to moving in between your sentences. I suggest trying to fix this through following more conventional writing patterns when you are writing.

Best of luck in your writing.

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