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About me and my big dreams


tinie 4 / 9  
May 28, 2012   #1
Task: write a short paragraph about a topic of your interest.
I like to write about myself. Please comment and correct my grammar.

My name is Suhartini and I come from Johor Bahru. My English teacher in secondary school was named Tini my toddler so he can call and remember my name easily. This is because there are three people named in the class Tini. Now I work at Park School Friends, Kajang. I had three years there. I will tell a bit about myself.

I was born in the town of Kota Tinggi which has many historical remains of the past. But my parents live in the coastal area that is surrounded by towering palm trees. This village is located 30 km away from the town city tinggi.Sekarang my parents still live there and it is a beautiful village. The famous village with the results of its waters and pristine beaches that draw tourists.

I teach in the afternoon. My school has many pupils. Subjects are taught English and physical education and kesihatan.Saya like to learn English and I want to speak English fluently because I know that English is the language of many countries in the world. Now I am currently enrolled in teacher Graduate Programme in English studies at UPM. I expect myself to do well in every class. I improve my English skills by listening to music and watch movies in English subtitles. I really want to go overseas to study in countries with good education, such as: United States, Singapore, England .. and so on. Malaysia has one of the best educational systems in the world. But I want to pursue and find the experience of studying in the country my father always encouraged orang.Ibu sayadalam anything and they hoped I would win a scholarship to the beautiful country. I always try my best to complete my self every day.

My hobbies reading novels, listening to music, watch movies, and shopping. I spend a lot of my free time reading novels. Many collections have my novel collect either from within or outside the country. My favorite food is spicy sour relish the tradition of the state of Johor. I do not like to play facebook or twitter as a hobby by people as nowadays. For me, it's just a waste of time and not all things necessary in the public report.

I do not have many achievements. Maybe I'm young and I have enough time to make more progress, but I always wanted to experience things a lot different in my life. No one is perfect. Of course, I also. I never fail, stumble and fall but I know that when I could stand I will learn many useful lessons in life. Among the achievements that made me and my parents are very proud

the highest score in the final examination in Form Two students then topped the category of Best Form Two, became Johan representing Teachers College Volleyball competition between Teacher Training Colleges in Malaysia.

I will try something new and get more achievements to make my parents proud of me.
I have big dreams when I was growing up, I will travel around the world, studying in the country and has his own business empire. I want to be a successful businessman. One day when I was old enough to have an adventure to me, when I can stand on my own feet, I would have my big dreams.
BaileyLeong - / 4  
May 29, 2012   #2
My name is Suhartini and I come from Johor Bahru. My English teacher in secondary school was named Tini my toddler so he can call and remember my name easily. This is because there are three people in the class named Tini. Currently, I work at Park School Friends, Kajang. I was there for three years. Now, I will talk a little bit more about myself.

I was born in the town of Kota Tinggi which has many historical remains, but my parents lived in the coastal area which is surrounded by towering palm trees. This village is located 30 km away from the town Tinggi, Sekarang. My parents still live there and it is a beautiful village. The famous village with the results of its waters and pristine beaches is what most draws tourists.

I teach in the afternoon, and my school has many students. English, physical education and kesihatan are taught. Teachers like to learn English, and I want to speak English fluently because I know that English is the language of many countries in the world. I am currently enrolled in the teacher Graduate Programme in English studies at UPM. I expect myself to do well in every class. I improve my English skills by listening to music and watching movies with English subtitles. I really want to go overseas to study in countries with a good education system, such as: United States, Singapore, and England. Malaysia has one of the best educational systems in the world, but I wish to pursue and find the experience of studying in the country. My father and mother always encouraged me with anything anything and they hoped I would win a scholarship to the beautiful country. I always try my best to accomplish this every day.

My hobbies are reading novels, listening to music, watching movies, and shopping. I spend a lot of my free time reading novels. I have collected many novels from within, and outside the country. My favorite food is spicy sour relish, which is a traditional food in the state of Johor. I do not like to go on such websites as facebook or twitter as many other people do nowadays. For me, it's just a waste of time and not all things are necessary in the public report.

I do not have many achievements at the moment, but because I'm young, I have enough time to make more progress. I have always wanted to experience many different things in my life. No one is perfect, and of course, this includes me. I never fail, but sometimes I stumble and fall. I know that when I can stand tall on my own, I will learn many useful lessons in life. Among the achievements that have made my parents and I very proud are: the highest score in the final examination in Form Two students, I then topped the category of Best Form Two, and I became the champion representing Teachers College Volleyball competition between Teacher Training Colleges in Malaysia. Everyday, I plan to try something new and achieve more things to make my parents proud of me.

As I get older, I have bigger dreams. Some of there are that I will travel around the world, and I will study in this country and have my own business empire. I plan to be a successful businessman. One day when I am old enough, and when I can stand on my own feet, My dreams will not seem so big, and will become a reality.

I hope this is good enough for you :)
I corrected it, and added in some things.


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