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A big Radar created by China called FAST which can detect alien behaviour


Bams17 28 / 43  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
The biggest Radar in the world ready to catch alien signals.

Recently, Science developed rapidly. As evidence, there is a big Radar created by China called FAST (Five hundred metre Aperture Spherical Telescope) the radar located in remote area around mountains of Guizhou, China. This area was protected by technology which was can block cell phone signal or wifi, because signals can be causing trouble on the Radar system. The radar build in early 1960S with size of dish 500 metres, and across is about 200 metres. The function of Radar claim that it can detect alien behaviour by dish and telescope can focuses in other object, while the mirror panels receiver can move in conjunction. They have moving flexible to find out object in the sky.

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yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
Hello Bambs, let me give my correction for you

the radar located in the remote area around ... ( it need article "the")

with the size of dish 500 metres, and across is about 200 metres ("size" need article "the")

The function of Radar claimclaims that it can detect alien ("the function" is singular subject, so you must write singular verb too)

telescope can focuses focus in other objectobjects(because "other" indicate the plural form)

They have moving flexible to find out the object in the sky ("object" need article "the")

thank you
Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Nov 29, 2016   #3
Recently, Science has developed rapidly.
... Telescope), the radar located ...
... by technology which was can can block cell phone signal or wifi, because signals ...
The radar build built in early 1960S with size of dish 500 metres, and acrossis about 200 metres
(in this case==> "and" become parallel structure, not to be conjunction) .
... and telescope can focuses in other object, while ...

overall, it is good writing, but i think you should try to write longer than right now
nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 29, 2016   #4
Hi, these are my thought towards your summary

Recently, Science has developed rapidly.
... a big Radar , created by China, called FAST (...), and the radar located in the remote area ...

... by technology which was can block cell- phone signal or wifi signal , because these signals can ...
The radar buildwas built in early 1960Ss with size of dish(plate) 500 metres,...
... by dish and telescope which can focuses in other object, ...
They have movingmovedflexibleflexibly to find out ...

Thank You


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