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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?



Bui Quang Dung 1 / -  
Sep 21, 2024   #1
Some people are of the opinion that having a large amount of income is of paramount importance , while feeling satisfied with an occupation holds a little value. Personally, I disagree with this way of thinking based on some reasons that are explained in this essay.

On the one hand, when a person has a large amount of salary, the can purchase anything they want. In this day and age , as the cost of living soars due to the stagnant inflation , the accessibility to opportunities that can fuel self-growth has become more limited. Without a large of amount of income, a person can not pursure futher education for themselves of afford high-quality learning for their children. Moreover, gaining a job with a lucrative income can also help people have access to mordern services, such as health insurance , computer services . Therefore, people completely want to obtain a significant amount of income raher than have an ideal workplace atmosphere .

On the other hand, many occupations in this day and age have demanded more from laborers due to the expansion of the economies and the competitions between companies around the world . Thus, a large percentage of employees are reporting more mental and physical issues related to their job. Becasue job satisfaction helps alleviate the problems with mental burden, it can directly help workers survive in this hostile workplace environment. In addition, felling satisfied with job can contribute to the work productivity. Therefore, workers can decicate significantly for their company and help those company get a huge amount of financial profits.

In conclusion, it can undeniable that gaining a large amount of income is a curical part in people' live .However , it is more important to have a satisfied working environment due to many problems in the community nowadays.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15224  
Sep 21, 2024   #2
based on some reasons that are explained in this essay.

Complete the basis of your opinion. State the 2 supporting subjects of the reasoning paragraphs. Do not forget that this is a single opinion essay and the majority of your final score will be based upon how well you structure your first paragraph. Work on the quality of your reasoning presentation along with an accurate prompt restatement.

in this day and age

This is an overly and often misused cliche in the English language that you are often using / repeating in this essay. Try to be more direct in your presentation. Since this simply means "at present", then say it that way. You do not get additional points for using cliche's in the language.

Your essay will fail because you did not support your point of view in the reasoning paragraphs. You contradicted your own opinion in the 2nd paragraph, which means you are not certain that your opinion is something you can personally support.
Daves 2 / 3  
Sep 22, 2024   #3
I think you might get the wrong end of the stick. If you choose to not support this thinking, then your explanation have to be clearly stated with evidence that backs your main idea.
zbilly06 1 / 4  
Sep 22, 2024   #4
in this day and age these days/at this moment in time
seeeed 4 / 5  
Sep 24, 2024   #5
"curical part in people' live"-crucial part in people's lives.


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